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Describe a person who helps other in his spare time

Describe a person who helps other in his spare time kbo68
I knew many person who is really are helpful for someone but here I would like to talk about an old person which is really helpful person and she is also try to put hundred percent to help someone her name is Renu Bala she is also my zoology teacher I remember vividly when I faced a lot of problem regarding to geology then it coaching from her and I knew many thing about her with my from my mam when I when I talking about Renu wala she told me that she is really helpful person and she spent there pension to help those person who cannot afford tuition fees or she also give cloth or books which is really good thing she is really love to help others person and after the help she feel a really good and confident also she is always ready to help someone according the nature of her I really feel good about ravana and I want to become same like that.
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helpful for someone
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person
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helpful
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person and
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try
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hundred
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someone her name is
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Renu
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Bala
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my zoology teacher I remember
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a lot of problem
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regarding to
geology then
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it coaching
from her and I knew
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about her with my from my mam
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when I when I
talking about
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Renu
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wala
she
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helpful
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person and
she spent there pension to
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those
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person
who cannot afford tuition
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fees or
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give
cloth or books which is
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thing she is
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to
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others
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help
she feel a
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good
and confident
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she is always ready to
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according
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ravana
and I want to become same like that.
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IELTS essay Describe a person who helps other in his spare time

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
169 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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