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Describe a hobby you would like to take up in the future

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My favorite hobby is reading. I enjoy reading a book when I am free. I started to do it when I was four years old. The first time I did it, I felt interested. So I kept reading. The teachers always taught me to read difficult words. I was happy when I read a story with a happy ending. I was thrilled when I read a detective story. I enjoy reading because I like to explore the imaginative world of my favorite author, J. K. Rowling who writes "Harry Potter". There are a lot of advantages of reading. Reading can make me relaxed and calm. I can also learn new vocabulary items. Then I can further improve my English. However, it can give me an unlimited imagination, so I can write books in the future. I can learn the different cultures and customs of other countries in the world too. I read at least one hour every day. I read books by myself. I usually read it at home. I wish I could read different kinds of books because it might be very challenging.
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when I am free. I
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difficult words. I was happy when I
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a story with a happy ending. I
was thrilled
when I
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read
a detective story.
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enjoy
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reading
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I like to explore the imaginative world of my favorite author, J. K. Rowling who writes
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Harry Potter
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. There are
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a lot of
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reading
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further
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improve
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I can write
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books
in the future. I can learn the
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different
cultures and customs of other countries in the world too. I
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at least one hour every day.
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I
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read
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books
by myself.
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usually
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it at home.
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wish I could
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different
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books
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because
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very
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IELTS essay Describe a hobby you would like to take up in the future

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
184 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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