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a thousand years of good prayer

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The story is written from a limited third-person perspective. This part becomes the strongest part of the story because it contains almost 3 main themes in the story: communication, conflict in culture, generation gap. Communication is a big deal in the story in general and in this conversation in particular. The word "no" holos her lack of communication and makes it clear that she does not want to speak again. conversation only works in one direction from the father. This "conversation" is not a "real conversation" as the writer says she asked "without looking up from her food". The basic thing to show respect to the other person when you talk is to make eye contact. It can be said that it is taken very seriously in conversation. shows the disinterest from the daughter and we can also see quite a distance in their affection. From Mr. Shi's point of view, we can see that he himself has admitted that there is a huge problem with communication. The passage "someone he shares language with but with whom he can no longer share a dear moment" follows. when he tried, but it was even less effective when he was talking to someone who didn't speak the same language. He interpreted that as blaming his daughter. This is like an act of "taking it out to somebody" and since then he talks about what a woman's "standard" is to explain to his daughter. This has touched the two people's view of "standards of a woman", because the clash between cultures is probably also why the daughter responded with a rather challenging voice. when saying "I'm divorced, so certainly I'm not a good woman". Mr. Shi ignores the statement and tells her that her mother is an example of a good woman. "mom" may have taken her back to her childhood memories, bringing her orgasms to a climax. replied, but now her eyes are "looking directly" which shows that the communication has improved but in a not very pleasant way when her statement says "did she succeed in making you talk" in a challenging tone and looked at him with a "fiercer" look. This shows that this is the first time she looks and talks seriously, proving that she has begun to open up more about herself. Instead of accepting, Mr. Shi started comparing her with his mother. This further proved the enormous influence on China's ancient culture, which made the daughter feel dissatisfied and began to question her father. No matter how hard she tries, she can't live up to his standards, which also shows that he wants to control his daughter with old concepts. Mr. Shi explains his "communication" is like how. The conversation gradually came to a standstill when the daughter asked when he would return. It was like the daughter's avoidance of him that she didn't want to see her father anymore and also her way of breaking the call. talk about this. from which we can see that parents are the role models of their children when it is Mr. Shi who made his daughter become close and now scolds her for that reason. So this conversation ended unhappily because the daughter left before she could touch the food. The conversation is like a cycle because Mr. Shi himself used to do the same when his daughter started to grow up. The author's use of the third person, but only from Mr. Shi's point of view, shows a lack of communication between him and his daughter, because he couldn't fully understand her personality.
The
story
is written
from a limited third-person perspective. This part becomes the strongest part of the
story
because
it contains almost 3 main themes in the
story
:
communication
, conflict in culture, generation gap.
Communication
is a
big
deal in the
story
in general
and in this
conversation
in particular
. The word
"
no
"
holos
her lack of
communication
and
makes
it
clear
that she does not want to speak again.
conversation
only
works in one direction from the father. This
"
conversation
"
is not a
"
real conversation
"
as the writer says she asked
"
without looking up from her food
"
. The basic thing to
show
respect to the other person when you
talk
is to
make
eye contact. It can
be said
that it
is taken
very
seriously
in
conversation
.
shows
the disinterest from the
daughter and
we can
also
see
quite a distance in their affection. From Mr. Shi's point of view, we can
see
that he himself has admitted that there is a huge problem with
communication
. The passage
"
someone he shares language with
but
with whom he can no longer share a dear moment
"
follows.
when
he tried,
but
it was even less effective when he was talking to someone who didn't speak the same language. He interpreted that as blaming his
daughter
. This is like an act of
"
taking it out to somebody
"
and since then he
talks
about what a woman's
"
standard
"
is to
explain
to his
daughter
. This has touched the two
people
's view of
"
standards of a woman
"
,
because
the clash between cultures is
probably
also
why the
daughter
responded with a
rather
challenging voice.
when
saying
"
I'm divorced,
so
certainly
I'm not a
good
woman
"
. Mr. Shi
ignores
the statement and
tells
her that her mother is an example of a
good
woman.
"
mom
"
may have taken her back to her childhood memories, bringing her orgasms to a climax.
replied
,
but
now
her eyes are
"
looking
directly
"
which
shows
that the
communication
has
improved
but
in a not
very
pleasant way when her statement says
"
did she succeed in making you talk
"
in a challenging tone and looked at him with a
"
fiercer
"
look. This
shows
that this is the
first
time she looks and
talks
seriously
, proving that she has begun to open up more about herself.
Instead
of accepting, Mr. Shi
started
comparing her with his mother. This
further
proved the enormous influence on China's ancient culture, which made the
daughter
feel dissatisfied and began to question her father. No matter how
hard
she tries, she can't
live
up to his standards, which
also
shows
that he wants to control his
daughter
with
old
concepts. Mr. Shi
explains
his
"
communication
"
is like how. The
conversation
gradually
came to a standstill when the
daughter
asked when he would return. It was like the daughter's avoidance of him that she didn't want to
see
her father anymore and
also
her way of breaking the call.
talk
about this.

from
which we can
see
that parents are the role models of their children when it is Mr. Shi who made his
daughter
become close and
now
scolds her for that reason.
So
this
conversation
ended
unhappily
because
the
daughter
left
before
she could touch the food. The
conversation
is like a cycle
because
Mr. Shi himself
used
to do the same when his
daughter
started
to grow up. The author's
use
of the third person,
but
only
from Mr. Shi's point of view,
shows
a lack of
communication
between him and his
daughter
,
because
he couldn't
fully
understand her personality.
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IELTS essay a thousand years of good prayer

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
595 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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