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Describe a famous person who you like or admire. You should say: • who they are • why they are famous • where and when you saw them and explain why you like this person.

Describe a famous person who you like or admire. You should say: • who they are • why they are famous • where and when you saw them and explain why you like this person. YBEKj
Well, for this task I'd like to talk about Bill Gates. He's the brilliant computer programmer who created Microsoft and the Windows operating system. I first saw Bill Gates on television in 2001. He was talking about Windows XP, which came out that year. I remember thinking that he is the richest man in the world, but if you look at him, you'd never know that. He just looks like a typical computer programmer. I like Bill Gates because he's responsible for bringing computers to millions of family homes around the world with his Windows operating system. This made computers easier to use for everyone and also at a price that many families could afford. I also like him because he was the world's youngest self-made billionaire at the time. If he could do it, I like to I think I could do it too. Finally, I admire him because he's very generous and uses his money to help people. He has given away a huge amount of his money to charity, and I believe he plans to give most of it away in the end. I think this is an excellent idea and I hope this can show other rich and powerful people that they should also help others
Well, for this task I'd like to talk about Bill Gates. He's the brilliant

computer programmer who created Microsoft and the Windows

operating system. I
first
saw
Bill Gates on television in 2001. He was

talking about Windows XP, which came out that year. I remember

thinking that he is the richest
man
in the world,
but
if you look at him,

you'd never know that. He
just
looks like a typical computer

programmer.

I like Bill Gates
because
he's responsible for bringing computers to

millions of family homes around the world with his Windows

operating system. This made computers easier to
use
for everyone

and
also
at a price that
many
families could afford.

I
also
like him
because
he was the world's youngest self-made

billionaire at the time. If he could do it, I like to I
think
I could do it too.

Finally
, I admire him
because
he's
very
generous and
uses
his money

to
help
people
. He has
given
away a huge amount of his money to

charity, and I believe he plans to give most of it away in the
end
. I

think
this is an excellent
idea
and I hope this can
show
other rich and

powerful
people
that they should
also
help
others
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IELTS essay Describe a famous person who you like or admire. You should say: • who they are • why they are famous • where and when you saw them and explain why you like this person.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
209 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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