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Describe a book that you have recently read. Please say- What was the name of the book? - What was the book about? - Do you think it was interesting? Why? v.1

Describe a book that you have recently read. Please say- What was the name of the book? - What was the book about? - Do you think it was interesting? Why? v. 1
The extend to which children have to follow rules is in itself a very complex issue. Since It varies based on a different nationality and the culture children grow up in. For some counties, it is compulsory for children to follow certain rules, while few countries give the freedom. In my perspective following strict rules have advantages and serious drawbacks as discussed below. To embark with, following stringent rules from early age makes better, mature and respectful citizens. Thus, children understand the importance of their action and try to follow discipline for their lifetime, which ultimately makes them wise and loyal individual. Also, countries with these customs have less cases of drugs and prostitution. Besides this, children connect with their regional customs and give respect to the laws they are abiding to follow. For example, In India parents teaches kids to touch the elderly’s feet, which shows the respect towards elderly and aids to create mature and respectful relations in the society. However, following firm rules to extreme level creates a small room to thrive in the life for the younger generation, This might create a gigantic effect on one’s life, their self confidence and their way of living. Moreover, even though yielding guidance to teenagers help them in later life, teenagers have behaviour to act impulsively. Consequently, this can result in a huge generation gap. Also, children should have rights to exercise their free will and develop their own pattern of character. Imposing stringent laws can ruin their individual personality and in some cases their childhood innocence. To put this in a nutshell, I believe that, even though it is clear that children should be guided by rules, these rules should not be imposed because as a human being they also deserve a room for their own personal trait development and adaptive behavioural pattern.
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complex issue. Since It varies based on a
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different
nationality and the culture
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grow up in. For
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counties, it is compulsory for
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children
to
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certain
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, while few countries give the freedom. In my perspective following strict
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have advantages and serious drawbacks as discussed below.

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rules
from early age
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makes
better, mature and respectful citizens.
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,
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children
understand the importance of their action and try to
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follow
discipline for their lifetime, which
ultimately
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makes
them wise and loyal individual.
Also
, countries with these customs have
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less
cases of drugs and prostitution.
Besides
this,
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children
connect with their regional customs and give respect to the laws they are abiding to
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follow
.
For example
, In India parents teaches kids to touch the elderly’s feet, which
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shows
the respect towards elderly and aids to create mature and respectful relations in the society.

However
, following firm
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rules
to extreme level creates a
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small
room to thrive in the life for the younger generation, This might create a gigantic effect on one’s life, their
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self confidence
and their way of living.
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yielding guidance to
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teenagers
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help
them in later life,
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teenagers
have
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behaviour
to act
impulsively
.
Consequently
, this can result in a huge generation gap.
Also
,
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children
should have rights to exercise their free will and develop their
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own
pattern of character. Imposing stringent laws can ruin their individual personality and in
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some
cases their childhood innocence.

To put this in a nutshell, I believe that,
even though
it is
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clear
that
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children
should
be guided
by
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rules
, these
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rules
should not
be imposed
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because
as a human being they
also
deserve a room for their
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own
personal trait development and adaptive
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behavioural
pattern.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Describe a book that you have recently read. Please say- What was the name of the book? - What was the book about? - Do you think it was interesting? Why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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