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Descibe your hometown or city where you grow up

Descibe your hometown or city where you grow up LlK13
I grew up in a city called Kokand, which is a small but very interesting and important city with a long history, situated in the famous Fergana Valley. The town has two main parts: old town and modern town. The old part of the city consists of the khan palace Urda, madrasahs, and memorials, which date back to the period of XIX – ХХ centuries. On the other hand, the new part has gone through numerous developments in the last few years and it is usually a busy part, which is the most attractive part of our town, in my opinion. Yes, definitely. My hometown offers all the modern facilities, nice environment and communication systems someone can expect from a town. Apart from that, the people are nice and friendly. We have got some nice educational institute and university, hospitals, schools, community centers, better security and open spaces that make this town a better place to live in. Actually yes. It has changed enormously. A lot of tall buildings and hotels have now emerged and constructions are underway. A new university is opened. Also parks are decorated with more beautiful flowers. Festivals are organized for tourists. Those signs are telling me that my hometown is actually developing quite rapidly and I am happy with it.
I grew up in a city called
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Kokand
, which is a
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small
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interesting and
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important
city with a long history, situated in the
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famous
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Fergana
Valley. The
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town
has two main
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parts
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old
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town
and modern
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town
. The
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old
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part
of the city consists of the khan palace
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Urda
, madrasahs, and memorials, which date back to the period of XIX
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–
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ХХ
centuries.
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, the new
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part
has gone through numerous developments in the last few years and it is
usually
a busy
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part
, which is the most attractive
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part
of our
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town
, in my opinion. Yes, definitely. My hometown offers all the modern facilities, nice environment and communication systems someone can
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expect
from a
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town
. Apart from that, the
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people
are nice and friendly. We have
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some
nice educational institute and university, hospitals, schools, community centers, better security and open spaces that
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make
this
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a better place to
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live
in.

Actually yes. It has
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changed
enormously
.
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A lot of
tall buildings and hotels have
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now
emerged and constructions are underway. A new university
is opened
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Also
parks
are decorated
with more
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beautiful
flowers. Festivals
are organized
for tourists. Those signs are telling me that my hometown is actually developing quite
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rapidly and
I am happy with it.
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IELTS essay Descibe your hometown or city where you grow up

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