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Advantages and disadvantages of Green Spaces in Cities

Advantages and disadvantages of Green Spaces in Cities dq6Y7
One problem in big cities is the lack of green spaces. For example, in the city where I live, we only have one small park, which is itself surrounded by concrete buildings. This is an issue because city citizens need green areas in order to relax, and the plants and trees also help to filter the air. To solve this problem, city authorities must invest more in building parks and gardens. As a result, the people who live in cities will suffer from less stress and breathe cleaner and safer air
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city citizens need green areas in order to relax, and the plants and trees
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to filter the air. To solve this problem, city authorities
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invest more in building parks and gardens.
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and breathe cleaner and safer
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IELTS essay Advantages and disadvantages of Green Spaces in Cities

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1 paragraphs
90 words
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