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In many countries people go to the shopping malls for entertainment

In many countries people go to the shopping malls for entertainment 8Qr7G
Different countries have different traditions, life style. Some countries can't afford thier food, some countries can launch rocket into space. As IT sphere is developing in very fast pace. Purchasing house hold items will be available online. But this does not mean that all sales departments are going to be closed. Do you agree that shops are going to change its direction and be entertainment center instead? As people constantly keep trying to improve their life. They accomplished very well so far. As a result, they may end up in having nothing to do most of a day. Which, it is good idea to spent some time with beloved ones entertaining. On the other hand, some people may not prefer wandering around purposelessly. Overall. It depends on what people prefer. In my opinion, most people like roaming on shops.
Different
countries have
different
traditions, life style.
Some
countries can't afford
thier
food,
some
countries can launch rocket into space.
As
IT sphere is developing in
very
fast
pace. Purchasing
house
hold items will be available online.
But
this does not mean that all sales departments are going to
be closed
.

Do you
agree
that shops are going to
change
its direction and be entertainment center
instead
?

As
people
constantly
keep
trying to
improve
their life. They accomplished
very
well
so
far.
As a result
, they may
end
up in having nothing to do most of a day.
Which
, it is
good
idea
to spent
some
time with beloved ones entertaining.

On the other hand
,
some
people
may not prefer wandering around
purposelessly
.

Overall
. It depends on what
people
prefer. In my opinion, most
people
like roaming on shops.
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IELTS essay In many countries people go to the shopping malls for entertainment

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  American English
5 paragraphs
139 words
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