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Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. v.5

Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. v. 5
Trees, from all over the world, are diminished and are continues to be reduced by mankind, with many serious perils to our nature and people should not connive at this deforestation. We need oxygen for our survival and trees provide us this most important element for our living. Immediate individual and governmental steps should be taken to save our most trusted friends, trees. Forests are the essential source of oxygen and trees encourages the soil and keep the ground from erosion. Furthermore, forests are habitats of a lot of animals and are home to myriad insects. People should take these aspects of forests into account and reform some regulations. The government should be more strict to control the unauthorised chop down activities. Namely, Amazon rainforest has been felled and used commercially and has already caused a huge damage to the wildlife and the environment. Consequently, proper legislations are very vital for preventing deforestation. In addition to legislations informing people might help to slow down saw down of forests. In spite of the legislations are oppose to people who remove trees, people will not perceive how perilous these actions are and they will continue to cut trees without realising the danger. Due to their benefit from the trade, the most efficient way to prevent deforestation is to inform people. For instance, governments might make some advertisement to show on the TVs and also on the roads. Furthermore, making some interviews by experts in the news may be another solution. More forest securities should be in place to prevent people from cutting down trees. Logging should be banned in areas where the percentage or forest is low and alternative ways of cooking should be introduced. Finally artificial and metal furniture should be used instead of using woods. To sum up, in spite of the vital roles forests play in our life people do not stop to cut down trees and use them for luxury. In this case, governments should reform legislations and inform people about logging danger. Without information people deforestation will continue for commercial use and array of animals and insects will get extended and we will endanger our mother planet.
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Trees
, from all over the world,
are diminished
and are continues to be
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reduced
by mankind, with
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many
serious perils to our nature and
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people
should not connive at this
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deforestation
. We need oxygen for our survival and
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trees
provide us this most
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important
element for our living. Immediate individual and governmental steps should
be taken
to save our most trusted friends, trees.

Forests are the essential source of oxygen and
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trees
encourages the soil and
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keep
the ground from erosion.
Furthermore
,
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forests
are habitats of
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a lot of
animals and are home to myriad insects.
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People
should take these aspects of
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forests
into account and reform
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some
regulations. The
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government
should be more strict to control the
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unauthorised
chop
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down
activities.
Namely
, Amazon rainforest has
been felled
and
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used
commercially
and has already caused
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a huge damage
to the wildlife and the environment.
Consequently
, proper
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legislations
are
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very
vital for preventing
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deforestation
.
In addition
to
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legislations
informing
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people
might
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help
to slow
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down
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saw
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down
of forests.

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In spite of
the
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legislations
are
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oppose
to
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people
who remove
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trees
,
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people
will not perceive how perilous these actions
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are and
they will continue to
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cut
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trees
without
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realising
the
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danger
. Due to their benefit from the trade, the most efficient way to
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prevent
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deforestation
is to inform
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people
.
For instance
,
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governments
might
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make
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some
advertisement to
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show
on the TVs and
also
on the roads.
Furthermore
, making
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some
interviews by experts in the news may be another solution.

More
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forest
securities should be in place to
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prevent
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people
from cutting
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down
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trees
. Logging should
be banned
in areas where the percentage or
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forest
is low and alternative ways of cooking should
be introduced
.
Finally
artificial and metal furniture should be
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used
instead
of using woods.

To sum up,
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in spite of
the vital roles
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forests
play in our life
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people
do not
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stop
to
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cut
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down
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trees
and
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use
them for luxury.
In this case
,
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governments
should reform
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legislations
and inform
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people
about logging
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danger
. Without information
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people
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deforestation
will continue for commercial
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use
and array of animals and insects will
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get
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extended and
we will endanger our mother planet.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
360 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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