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Day by day the amount of students are increasing who are going to the university after graduating tertiary school rather than working.

Day by day the amount of students are increasing who are going to the university after graduating tertiary school rather than working. This essay will disgust the benefits and drawbacks for students who opt to do this. Beginning with the positive points who are opting to study the university they have a concrete lpans what to do in the future. Undergraduates can find better job opportunities with their qualifications, earn higher salary, thus they look favourably on it. For example most jobs require specific knowledgeable and skilled person. Another benefits, if they work without diploma they will get less wage along with cannot find jobs any time, in the fact of that the repetitive jobs are now done by machines. On the downside, the some student's parents cannot afford to pay for their university's expenses. For example a university degree is not necessary for many service professions for builders, plumbings and manuals. Apart from this a healthy economy needs a wide range of workers. For example in the UK ther is currently a shortage of plumbers. We know their services are therefore becoming more and more expensive. In conclusion to study at university is more better than working, because you broaden your horizons and it open the door for jobs anytime anywhere. The working like manuals is easier said than done ( not easy as appears idiom).
Day by day the amount of students
are
increasing who are going to the
university
after
graduating
tertiary school
rather
than working. This essay will disgust the benefits and drawbacks for students who opt to do this.

Beginning with the
positive
points who are opting to study the
university
they have a concrete
lpans
what to do in the future. Undergraduates can find better
job
opportunities with their qualifications, earn higher salary,
thus
they look
favourably
on it.
For example
most
jobs
require specific knowledgeable and skilled person.

Another benefits, if they work without diploma they will
get
less wage along with cannot find
jobs
any time, in the fact of that the repetitive
jobs
are
now
done by machines.

On the downside, the
some
student's parents cannot afford to pay for their university's expenses.
For example
a
university
degree is not necessary for
many
service professions for builders, plumbings and manuals. Apart from this a healthy economy needs a wide range of workers.

For example
in the UK
ther
is
currently
a shortage of plumbers. We know their services are
therefore
becoming more and more expensive.

In conclusion
to study at
university
is
more better
than working,
because
you broaden your
horizons and
it
open
the door for
jobs
anytime anywhere.

The working like manuals is easier said than done
(
not easy as appears idiom).
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IELTS essay Day by day the amount of students are increasing who are going to the university after graduating tertiary school rather than working.

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