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Presently, many school graduates prefer to study at an institute rather than work after graduation.

Presently, many school graduates prefer to study at an institute rather than work after graduation. In the first place there many advantages of studying at University. The main important advantages of this is that it serves to give a person his own prestige and respect in society, since in modern times educated people are the pillar of society. An additional merits of studying us the chances of a person studying at University are much wider than those of ordinary people. The next pros is we all know that today many institutions and organizations do not accept without a diploma. As a result, they may not be able to work despite having knowledge, besides diplomas confirming their education can also be the key that opens the door to many successes in life. Just as every good has its bad, so studying university has its own disadvantages that is, if a person studies at University, but does not have the knowledge and skill, what is the use of studying it. That is why some students prefer to work. One of the main demerits of it can be detrimental to the financial side of the parents or minority students, because some parents cannot afford to pay for tuition. Another drawback is even though we have studied we may not to be able to find the job we want and even if we do, our monthly salary may not be enough to cover our expenses. In conclusion, even though both these aspects have their own pros and cons henca, choices should be made by an individual according to student's interests. .
Presently
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school graduates prefer to study at an institute
rather
than work after graduation.

In the
first
place there
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many
advantages of
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studying
at
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University
. The main
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important
advantages of this is that it serves to give a person his
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own
prestige and respect in society, since in modern times educated
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people
are the pillar of society.
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of
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studying
us the chances of a person
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studying
at
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University
are much wider than those of ordinary
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people
. The
next
pros is we all know that
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today
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many
institutions and organizations do not accept without a diploma.
As a result
, they may not be able to work despite having knowledge,
besides
diplomas confirming their education can
also
be the key that opens the door to
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many
successes in life.

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as every
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has
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bad
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studying
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university
has its
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disadvantages
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,
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does not have the knowledge and
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skill
, what is the
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use
of
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studying
it.
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why
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some
students prefer to work. One of the main demerits of it can be detrimental to the financial side of the parents or minority students,
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because
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some
parents cannot afford to pay for tuition. Another drawback is
even though
we have studied we may not to be able to find the job we want and even if we do, our monthly salary may not be
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enough
to cover our expenses.

In conclusion
,
even though
both these aspects have their
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own
pros and cons
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, choices should
be made
by an individual according to student's interests.
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IELTS essay Presently, many school graduates prefer to study at an institute rather than work after graduation.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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