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Dangerous sports should be banned.Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, the popularity of dangerous sports has increased. Many a time playing adventure sports leads to serious injuries and even loss of life. Some people argue that risky sports should be banned. I completely agree with this view. The vast majority of people participating in adventure sports are youngsters. They are driven by adrenaline and do not always manage to comprehend the risks. They just seek the thrill. Playing an adventure sport like white water rafting or paragliding might help them conquer their fears or discover new talents. Unfortunately, such activities are dangerous. A mishap may incapacitate the participant for life or claim their life. To give an example, one of my very close friends lost his left leg due to misbalance while landing from Paragliding in Nepal last year. Such incidents are the loss of one person and a lesson for others. While one can argue that people participating in such events are aware of the risks, nobody is supposed to willingly put their life in danger. Life is a gift. Of course, everyone wants to live it to the fullest but this should not be done by exposing ourselves to avoidable risks. Another argument in favour of banning such sports is that the ban saves public money. Oftentimes, the government is forced to launch rescue operations when players go missing or find themselves in dangerous situations. Such operations are expensive and could be avoided if adventure sport is banned. To conclude, everyone has the right to play a sport they enjoy; however, nobody should be allowed to throw themselves into danger. Hence, in my opinion, dangerous sports should be banned. Do you have an essay on this topic? Submit it below in the comments for a free band score estimate.
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has increased.
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a time playing
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leads to serious injuries and even loss of
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life
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. I completely
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The vast majority of
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are youngsters. They
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by adrenaline and do not always manage to comprehend the
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. They
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seek the thrill. Playing an
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like white water rafting or paragliding might
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help
them conquer their fears or discover new talents. Unfortunately, such activities are
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dangerous
. A mishap may incapacitate the participant for
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life
or claim their
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life
. To give an example, one of my
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close friends lost his
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left
leg due to
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misbalance
while landing from Paragliding in Nepal last year. Such incidents are the loss of one person and a lesson for others.

While one can argue that
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participating in such
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are aware of the
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, nobody
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favour
of banning such
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is that the ban saves public money. Oftentimes, the
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government
is forced
to launch rescue operations when players go missing or find themselves in
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dangerous
situations. Such operations are expensive and could
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if
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adventure
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sport
is banned
.

To conclude
, everyone has the right to play a
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they enjoy;
however
, nobody should be
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allowed
to throw themselves into
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danger
.
Hence
, in my opinion,
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dangerous
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sports
should
be banned
.

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IELTS essay Dangerous sports should be banned.

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