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Dangerous sport should be banned.Do you agree or disagree?

To achieve the popularity, nowadays, playing dangerous sports is becoming common among youngsters. However, some people are against participating in adventure sports, since it can lead to fatal consequences and I completely agree with them. Initially, people should conceive how much they are risking. Certain teenagers are even ready for jumping from top of the Everest to obtain high adrenalin. But they never realise how it can change their lives, if they seriously injure themselves. Life is agift and neither popularity nor sport doesn't worth to put it in danger. Moreover, dangerous sport is not a single way of becoming famous. Additionally, it causes the pollution of enviroment. Because risky sports are often held as a spectacle. Many trees are cut down to make decoration for performers and settles for people. As a result it will destroy natural beauty of the place. In conclusion, by restricting this type of sport, we are able to save both mankind and nature.
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, by restricting this type of
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, we are able to save both mankind and nature.
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IELTS essay Dangerous sport should be banned.Do you agree or disagree?

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