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Dangerous/extreme sports may cause fatal injuries, so they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable that popularity of adventurous activities such as bungee jumping, skydiving, river rafting and many more has increased in a past few decades. Some masses opine that these scary adventures do not put an end to life if followed with certain precautions, while others refute it. In my opinion, I agree with the former one. This essay will delve deeper into pertinent arguments and discussions before deducing a plausible conclusion. The primary reason backing my viewpoint is that youngsters love adventures as they get thrill out of them as well as sense of contentment by exploiting the opportunity to challenge their abilities and potentialities while performing the extreme tasks such as skiing and rock climbing. In addition, one can earn name and fame by pursuing these adventures. For instance, many advertising companies hire expert in dangerous sports to endorse their products, and they get employment because of their skills. Apart from that, people get the courage to face the unforeseen circumstances of life because extreme sports improve their skills to tackle the difficulties during natural calamities such as floods, landslides and so on. However, if these activities are not performed under specific supervision, they may prove fatal. To illustrate, people watch the heart throbbing stunts on television and try to imitate them, resulting into causing harm to themselves. Therefore, people should take training from licensed companies and perform stunts under strict supervision to avoid any risk and damage to life. To conclude, I would like to reinstate my belief that extreme activities do not cause death unless they are done under proper supervision, so it is inappropriate to say that they should be banned.
It is irrefutable that popularity of adventurous activities such as bungee jumping, skydiving, river rafting and
many
more has increased in a past few decades.
Some
masses opine that these scary adventures do not put an
end
to life if followed with certain precautions, while others refute it. In my opinion, I
agree
with the former one. This essay will delve deeper into pertinent arguments and discussions
before
deducing a plausible conclusion.

The primary reason backing my viewpoint is that youngsters
love
adventures as they
get
thrill out of them
as well
as sense of contentment by exploiting the opportunity to challenge their abilities and potentialities while performing the extreme tasks such as skiing and rock climbing.
In addition
, one can earn name and fame by pursuing these adventures.
For instance
,
many
advertising
companies
hire expert in
dangerous
sports to endorse their products, and they
get
employment
because
of their
skills
. Apart from that,
people
get
the courage to face the unforeseen circumstances of life
because
extreme sports
improve
their
skills
to tackle the difficulties during natural calamities such as floods, landslides and
so
on.

However
, if these activities are not performed under specific supervision, they may prove fatal. To illustrate,
people
watch
the heart throbbing stunts on television and try to imitate them, resulting into causing harm to themselves.
Therefore
,
people
should take training from licensed
companies
and perform stunts under strict supervision to avoid any
risk
and damage to life.

To conclude
, I would like to reinstate my belief that extreme activities do not cause death unless they
are done
under proper supervision,
so
it is inappropriate to say that they should
be banned
.
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IELTS essay Dangerous/extreme sports may cause fatal injuries, so they should be banned.

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