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“Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. Why is it not popular in many places? And how to increase its popularity? v.1

“Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. Why is it not popular in many places? And how to increase its popularity? v. 1
Congestion is one of the main causes of environmental problems. It is said that cycling plays an important role in reducing air pollution. This essay will give explanations on its unpopularity and provide some solutions to encourage people to cycle in most areas. One of the reason why people do not cycle in some places, especially in the cities, is its time-consuming. Instead of riding a long way, people tend to use other transports that take less time to reach the destination such as motorbikes, cars and trains. Furthermore, those vehicles give convenience for users. For example, people can drive their car to work despite of bad weather or drive a motorbike to work daily without getting tired. Cycling, on the other hand, is not the helpful traffic for a rainy or hot day. As a consequence, many people refuse to use bicycles although it is friendly for environment. There are various measures to make cycling popular to everyone in all places. The most effective way is to increasing people’s awareness of benefits of riding bikes for both health and environment. Not only reducing smoke from other vehicles which is the main cause to air pollution, cycling also helps to decrease many diseases such as obesity, diabetics and heart attack. In addition, government can increase tax on cars or motorbikes and impose higher price on parking to reduce numbers of people who use those transports. In conclusion, in spite of important role in protecting environment, there are many reasons why people prefer to use other vehicles. Government should implement some solutions to stimulate people to use bicycles in every places.
Congestion is one of the main causes of environmental problems. It
is said
that
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cycling
plays an
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important
role in reducing air pollution. This essay will give explanations on its unpopularity and provide
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some
solutions to encourage
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people
to cycle in most areas.

One of the reason why
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people
do not cycle in
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some
places,
especially
in the cities, is its time-consuming.
Instead
of riding a long way,
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people
tend to
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use
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other
transports that take less time to reach the destination such as motorbikes, cars and trains.
Furthermore
, those vehicles give convenience for users.
For example
,
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people
can drive their car to work
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despite of
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bad
weather or drive a motorbike to work daily without getting tired.
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Cycling
, on the
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other
hand, is not the helpful traffic for a rainy or hot day. As a consequence,
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many
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people
refuse to
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use
bicycles although it is friendly for environment.

There are various measures to
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make
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cycling
popular to everyone in all places. The most effective way is
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to increasing
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people’s
awareness of benefits of riding bikes for both health and environment. Not
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only
reducing smoke from
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other
vehicles which is the main cause to air pollution,
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cycling
also
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helps
to decrease
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many
diseases such as obesity, diabetics and heart attack.
In addition
,
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government
can increase tax on cars or motorbikes and impose higher price on parking to
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reduce
numbers of
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people
who
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use
those transports.

In conclusion
,
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in spite of
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important
role in protecting environment, there are
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many
reasons why
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people
prefer to
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use
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other
vehicles.
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Government
should implement
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some
solutions to stimulate
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people
to
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use
bicycles in every
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places
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay “Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. Why is it not popular in many places? And how to increase its popularity? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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