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Currently, deforestation is one of major concerns for global warming. For instance, an urban area without trees and plants surrounding will be impacted by pollution and hazardous chemical. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Currently, deforestation is one of major concerns for global warming. For instance, an urban area without trees and plants surrounding will be impacted by pollution and hazardous chemical. v. 1
The earth was designed to be filled with forests in the majority of land for a reason. We human beings have taken advantage of the forests for more than a millennium, and now we are destroying forests, cutting them down into barren lands in the name of modernization. This is resulting in deforestation. Deforestation has been a major concern of the 21st century, not only because it is rapidly depleting our vegetation, also because it is adding to an already increasing level of global warming. Forests, rivers, mountains, these aren't man made, but they all exist to serve a critical purpose in the sustainability of nature. Apart from providing vegetation for hundreds of animals, forests are also the home to these wildlifes. Forests also help in maintaining seasons throughout the year by adding to the natural process of the water cycle. They are not only stopping the water bearing clouds and cause rainfall, but also hold the majority of underground water in their roots giving us another means of drinking water. Forests also play an important role in the consumption of carbon dioxide and provisioning of oxygen, thus maintaining a healthy balance and purity in the atmospheric air. Today, due to our own selfish reasons, we have destroyed the majority of the forests. Be it for obtaining space, or wood, or by simply regarding forest as a dumping ground for our industrial wastes, we have been depleting their existence. Lesser forests mean lesser chances of rainfall, which in turn increases our the temperature levels of earth. Depletion of forests also results in an abundance left over carbon dioxide, which causes global warming. This also results in increased levels of pollution as there are such limited resources to help purify the polluted air. Deforestation certainly is adding to global warming and will affect all of us at a global scale. We all know that "Prevention is better than cure", however currently we are at a stage where the disease has spread across the world, and the only way out is for us to accept this fact and find a cure. If every member of the family makes a decision to plant and take care of 5 seedlings, that can surely have a major impact in the reduction of deforestation and hence global warming.
The earth
was designed
to
be filled
with
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forests
in the majority of land for a reason. We human beings have taken advantage of the
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forests
for more than a millennium, and
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now
we are destroying
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forests
, cutting them down into barren lands in the name of modernization. This is resulting in
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deforestation
.
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Deforestation
has been a major concern of the 21st century, not
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only
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because
it is
rapidly
depleting our vegetation,
also
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because
it is adding to an already increasing level of
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global
warming.

Forests, rivers, mountains, these aren't
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man
made,
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but
they all exist to serve a critical purpose in the sustainability of nature. Apart from providing vegetation for hundreds of animals,
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forests
are
also
the home to these
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wildlifes
.
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Forests
also
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help
in maintaining seasons throughout the year by adding to the natural process of the
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water
cycle. They are not
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only
stopping the
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water
bearing clouds and cause rainfall,
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but
also
hold the majority of underground
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water
in their roots giving us another means of drinking
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water
.
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Forests
also
play an
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important
role in the consumption of carbon dioxide and provisioning of oxygen,
thus
maintaining a healthy balance and purity in the atmospheric air.

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Today
, due to our
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own
selfish reasons, we have
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destroyed
the majority of the
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forests
. Be it for obtaining space, or wood, or by
simply
regarding
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forest
as a dumping ground for our industrial wastes, we have been depleting their existence. Lesser
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forests
mean lesser chances of rainfall, which in turn increases our the temperature levels of earth. Depletion of
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forests
also
results in an abundance
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
over carbon dioxide, which causes
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global
warming. This
also
results in increased levels of pollution as there are such limited resources to
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help
purify the polluted air.
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Deforestation
certainly
is adding to
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global
warming and will affect all of us at a
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global
scale.

We all know that
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Prevention is better than cure
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"
,
however
currently
we are at a stage where the disease has spread across the world, and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
way out is for us to accept this fact and find a cure. If every member of the family
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
a decision to plant and take care of 5 seedlings, that can
surely
have a major impact in the reduction of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
deforestation
and
hence
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
warming.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Currently, deforestation is one of major concerns for global warming. For instance, an urban area without trees and plants surrounding will be impacted by pollution and hazardous chemical. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
382 words
6
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