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Currently, all entering freshman take level 1 English first and then level 2. Starting in the fall term, freshman will be required to take an English entrance exam to determine which level they should be placed in. Those with a high enough score will not v.1

Currently, all entering freshman take level 1 English first and then level 2. Starting in the fall term, freshman will be required to take an English entrance exam to determine which level they should be placed in. Those with a high enough score will not v. 1
There has been a decrease in the number of youths that make use of the conventional way of media outreach. For example, reading newspapers and watching the television. This essay will discuss the two main reasons behind this issue. In addition, this essay will also suggest two main solutions that can be used to lessen this situation. Two main explanations for this noticeable decrease in the number of young adults following the news either on the television or reading papers are outdated report and interest. Most youths are not interested in the events happening in the world; hence, they rather spend their day on other activities of interest to them. Moreover, the data gotten from these conventional media sources are often outdated. Since these outlets are not the only sources where one can learn about recent events, the youths of today would rather follow media platforms where up to date info can be provided. Two solutions which can alleviate this issue are the introduction of civic education in schools and updated information. The impact of education on young people is greater than we realize. Institutes should introduce specific subjects so as to make their students interested in secular topics. For instance, a research carried out at Harvard showed that students who attended institutes which has incorporated civic education in their curriculum are more prone to listening to the news. Furthermore, news outlets should dispense updated news to the public. In conclusion, more and more young people in the society today will rarely listen to news using the conventional means. This write-up discussed the two reasons for this problem, including lack of interest and outdated information. This write-up also suggested how this problem can be reduced, including a better curriculum in schools and recent news coverage.
There has been a decrease in the number of youths that
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make
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use
of the conventional way of media outreach.
For example
, reading newspapers and watching the television. This essay will discuss the two main reasons behind this issue.
In addition
, this essay will
also
suggest two main solutions that can be
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used
to lessen this situation.

Two main explanations for this noticeable decrease in the number of young adults following the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
either on the television or reading papers
are outdated
report and interest. Most youths are not interested in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
happening in the world;
hence
, they
rather
spend their day on other activities of interest to them.
Moreover
, the data gotten from these conventional media sources are
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often
outdated. Since these outlets are not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
sources where one can learn about recent
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
, the youths of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
would
rather
follow media platforms where up to date info can
be provided
.

Two solutions which can alleviate this issue are the introduction of civic education in schools and updated information. The impact of education on young
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people
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is
greater than we realize. Institutes should introduce specific subjects
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so as to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their students interested in secular topics.
For instance
,
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a research
carried out at Harvard
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showed
that students who attended institutes which has incorporated civic education in their curriculum are more prone to listening to the
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news
.
Furthermore
,
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news
outlets should dispense updated
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news
to the public.

In conclusion
, more and more young
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people
in the society
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
will rarely listen to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
using the conventional means. This write-up discussed the two reasons for this problem, including lack of interest and outdated information. This write-up
also
suggested how this problem can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
, including a better curriculum in schools and recent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
coverage.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Currently, all entering freshman take level 1 English first and then level 2. Starting in the fall term, freshman will be required to take an English entrance exam to determine which level they should be placed in. Those with a high enough score will not v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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