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Crimes in cities are higher than in rural areas. Discuss why and profer solutions

Crimes in cities are higher than in rural areas. Discuss why and profer solutions pRKP2
In recent times, the rate of crime in most societies is mostly higher in metropolitan cities than the suburban areas. The growing rate of crime is a worrisome factor that plagues cities as all sorts of crimes are commited from petty theft to elaborate, sometimes dark and dangerous murders, heists, thefts, drug related offences, etc. In my opinion, the quest for easy and quick money is a major factor in the increase of crime in the cities. The city bustle and fast life is an attraction to many people from different parts of the world. Everyone wants to make it big in the city, live the urban life by any means possible even to the detriment of others. The easy lure of crime, its appeal and quick earnings is not easy to ignore even the most pious have been tempted by this factor. Living in a city is not cheap either compared to the rural areas where life is easier and cheaper. The suburban areas are usually smaller communities with everybody knowing each other therefore crime is little or barely existent. The high rate of unemployment is also a key factor in the increase in crime and also under employment which means although an individual has a job it is a low paying job. The main ways to reduce crime is to increase employment rate in the society and reduce the number of minimum wage jobs. This will encourage more people to work in order to earn a decent living. Also the government should increase social amenities in the cities from parks to recreational centres so that young people can have fairly decent leisure and physical activities whenever they are bored or inactive. I believe these and many more suggestions would reduce crime rate. When people become more engaged by education, work or social activities and they have less financial worries definately crime will reduce in the metropolis.
In recent times, the
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rate
of
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crime
in most societies is
mostly
higher in metropolitan
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cities
than the suburban areas. The growing
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rate
of
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crime
is a worrisome
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factor
that plagues
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cities
as all sorts of
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crimes
are
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commited
from petty theft to elaborate,
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sometimes
dark and
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dangerous
murders, heists, thefts, drug related
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offences
, etc.

In my opinion, the quest for easy and quick money is a major
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factor
in the
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increase
of
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crime
in the
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cities
. The city bustle and
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fast
life is an attraction to
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many
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people
from
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different
parts of the world. Everyone wants to
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make
it
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big
in the city,
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live
the urban life by any means possible even to the detriment of others. The easy lure of
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crime
, its appeal and quick earnings is not easy to
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ignore
even the most pious have
been tempted
by this
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factor
. Living in a city is not
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cheap
either compared to the rural areas where life is easier and cheaper. The suburban areas are
usually
smaller communities with everybody knowing each other
therefore
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crime
is
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little
or
barely
existent. The high
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rate
of unemployment is
also
a key
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factor
in the
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increase
in
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crime
and
also
under employment which means although an individual has a job it is a low paying job.

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The
main ways to
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reduce
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crime
is to
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increase
employment
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rate
in the society and
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reduce
the number of minimum wage jobs. This will encourage more
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people
to work in order to earn a decent living.
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Also
the
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government
should
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increase
social amenities in the
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cities
from parks to recreational
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centres
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so
that young
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people
can have
fairly
decent leisure and physical activities whenever they
are bored
or inactive.

I believe these and
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many
more suggestions would
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reduce
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crime
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rate
. When
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people
become more engaged by education, work or social
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activities and
they have less financial worries
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definately
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crime
will
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reduce
in the metropolis.
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IELTS essay Crimes in cities are higher than in rural areas. Discuss why and profer solutions

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