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Crime rates have increased significantly around the globe . some people believe it is an unpreventable issue. I completely disagree with this point of view.

Crime rates have increased significantly around the globe. some people believe it is an unpreventable issue. I completely disagree with this point of view. VrxBm

First of all, there are a number of ways to reduce crime rate. Anti-social behaviour such as terrorism, kidnapping, murder and burglary comes from unemployment. Due to unsufficient money for basic needs, perpetrator try to find a job but they are not accepted on account of their lack of qualification. thus, they have to commit a crime. As a result, they will be a member of violent activity. Government should provide more job vacancies. It results in decreasing the percentage of criminal actions. Secondly, guns must be banned totally in all the countries all over the world. People are killing each other for minor things with using this dangerous weapon. To give an example: the people of Afg’anistan kill one another when they go out at night for walking. Another bright fact is that people are taking their own life without any kind of pain with the help of this hazardous tool. Gun-related deaths in excess of 300 000 people per year. If government take serious measures to restrict this, the rate of violent activities will drop markedly. In conclusion, crime can be prevented by giving more job oppornutiesas well as taking strict rules not to use guns. I disagree with this idea because of these arguments which I mentioned above.

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First of all
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reduce
 crime rate. Anti-social Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.behavior
behaviour
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 from unemployment. Due to Possible spelling mistake found.insufficient
unsufficient
 money for basic needs, perpetrator try to find a job This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
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accepted
 on account of their lack of qualification. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterThus
thus
, they This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 commit a crime. As a result
, they will be a member of violent activity. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
Government
 should provide more job vacancies. It results in decreasing the percentage of criminal actions.

Secondly
, guns This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
be banned
totally
 in all the countries all over the world. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
People
 are killing each other for minor things with using this This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hazardousrisky
dangerous
 weapon. To give an example: the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
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Afg
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anistan
 kill one another when they go out at night for walking. Another bright fact is that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 are taking their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 life without any kind of pain with the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 of this hazardous tool. Gun-related deaths in excess of 300 000 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 per year. If This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 take serious measures to restrict this, the rate of violent activities will drop markedly
.

In conclusion
, crime can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :precluded
prevented
 by giving more job Possible spelling mistake found.
oppornutiesas
 well as taking strict This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirements
rules
 not to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 guns. I disagree with this This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtconceptnotion
idea
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of these arguments which I mentioned above. 