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Creative artists should have the freedom to express their ideas through movies, arts and music. Goverment should have no restrictions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.2

Creative artists should have the freedom to express their ideas through movies, arts and music. Goverment should have no restrictions. with this opinion? v. 2
Working in artistic fields such as movies, music or arts requires creativity and uniqueness. Creative artists, therefore, should have the right to be free to express their personal ideas without having to worry about the government restrictions. In this essay, I will point out the two main reasons to support the view of giving freedom to artists. To begin with, having the right to express ideas and opinions will not only help the creators' work become more unique but also help them to stand out from the crowd and attract more audience. This is especially true for those working in the fields that demand high creativity and have strong competitors. For instance, in the U. S, artists are free to express themselves in whichever ways they want, as long as it is suitable for them to deliver the message. They would not care about any controversial issues arises around their work. They make it purely because of their passion and inspirations. Furthermore, if government applies restrictions to those fields, all of the work produced will be the same with a so-called acceptable format. Audience will gradually find them boring, creators will run out of ideas because there is no room for them to grow anymore. Vietnamese artists used to go through that phase back in the days when the Internet was not yet developed and people were still holding onto their traditional values. Gradually, people have come to terms with understanding the art values and become less judgmental. All in all, the freedom to be creative is important and needs to be protected. Instead of criticizing the work we are not familiar with, it is better if we try to understand and appreciate a good work of art and encourage artists to be as creative as they want to be.
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artists
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ideas
without having to worry about the
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restrictions. In this essay, I will point out the two main reasons to support the view of giving freedom to artists.

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them to stand out from the crowd and attract more audience. This is
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, in the U. S,
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artists
are free to express themselves in whichever ways they want, as long as it is suitable for them to deliver the message. They would not care about any controversial issues arises around their
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produced will be the same with a
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ideas
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because
there is no room for them to grow anymore. Vietnamese
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artists
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used
to go through that phase back in the days when the Internet was not
yet
developed and
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people
were
still
holding onto their traditional values.
Gradually
,
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people
have
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come
to terms with understanding the art values and become less judgmental.

All in all, the freedom to be creative is
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important
and needs to
be protected
.
Instead
of criticizing the
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work
we are not familiar with, it is better if we try to understand and appreciate a
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good
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work
of art and encourage
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artists
to be as creative as they want to be.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Creative artists should have the freedom to express their ideas through movies, arts and music. Goverment should have no restrictions. with this opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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