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Creative artists should have the freedom to express their ideas through movies, arts and music. Goverment should have no restrictions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

Creative artists should have the freedom to express their ideas through movies, arts and music. Goverment should have no restrictions. with this opinion? v. 1
Restoring heritage buildings in a large metropolitan city by the government should be halted, instead the money need to be spent on improving infrastructure and residence for the general public. In my opinion, I disagree on this as the significance of the buildings are important and the history of our country needs to be maintained. The common misconception is that spending on traditional building incur high cost to the taxpayers and results in tax money used for the wrong priorities. For instance, due to raising housing cost and increasing traffic congestion during peak hours. People think that instead of maintaining the old building, government should spend money on affordable housing or improving the roads. In addition, the old buildings are considered a hindrance to the development and incur high maintenance cost. For example, maintaining the old building would be expensive instead the space could be used for newer larger buildings. However, the significance of such historic buildings is important and needs to be preserved. To give an example, Gandhi’s house in India stands for his life, achievement and his contributions to the country and its people. Moreover, older building preserves the history and culture that could be used to learn the life of older generations and important events. In addition, its architecture and design could be used to understand its time. Also, money could be raised by making it a tourist attraction and the funds could be used for maintaining it. In conclusion, Older building needs to be preserved to retain its architecture, to preserve the history and culture of its time. In future money from tourism and other events could be used for its maintanance
Restoring heritage
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in a large metropolitan city by the
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government
should
be halted
,
instead
the
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money
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need
to
be spent
on improving infrastructure and residence for the
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general public
. In my opinion, I disagree on this as the significance of the
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buildings
are
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important
and the history of our country
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needs
to
be maintained
.

The common misconception is that spending on traditional
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building
incur high cost to the taxpayers and results in tax
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money
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used
for the
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wrong
priorities.
For instance
, due to raising housing cost and increasing traffic congestion during peak hours.
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People
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think
that
instead
of maintaining the
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old
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building
,
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government
should spend
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money
on affordable housing or improving the roads.
In addition
, the
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old
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buildings
are considered
a hindrance to the development and incur high maintenance cost.
For example
, maintaining the
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old
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building
would be expensive
instead
the space could be
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used
for newer larger buildings.

However
, the significance of such historic
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buildings
is
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important
and
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needs
to
be preserved
. To give an example, Gandhi’s
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house
in India stands for his life, achievement and his contributions to the country and its
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people
.
Moreover
, older
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building
preserves the history and culture that could be
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used
to learn the life of older generations and
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important
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events
.
In addition
, its architecture and design could be
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used
to understand its time.
Also
,
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money
could
be raised
by making it a tourist attraction and the funds could be
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used
for maintaining it.

In conclusion
, Older
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building
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needs
to
be preserved
to retain its architecture, to preserve the history and culture of its time. In future
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money
from tourism and other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
could be
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used
for its
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maintanance
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Creative artists should have the freedom to express their ideas through movies, arts and music. Goverment should have no restrictions. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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