Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Children over 15 should be allowed to make decisions about their lives without the interference of their parents or teachers. Society should accept that children mature at a younger age these days and should adjust the law accordingly. Do you agree or dis v.2

Children over 15 should be allowed to make decisions about their lives without the interference of their parents or teachers. Society should accept that children mature at a younger age these days and should adjust the law accordingly. Do you agree or dis v. 2
It is true that teenagers, age 15 and above, should be given chance to make their own decisions without anyone interfering their lives. While some people might say that children are not well-developed enough to make choices, others would argue that they are becoming much more mature these days. The purpose of this essay is going to prove that teenagers have the right to be independent through demonstrating the two main arguments. To begin with, children should be free to live their own lives. By deciding for themselves, they can learn how to become more responsible and thereby grow more. In addition, giving them chance to do things at their own will could enhance the relationship between parents and children, since there is no forcing decisions involved, therefore no arguments. For me, ever since my parents have stopped making decisions on my behalf, I became more free and felt connect with them more. What' s more, being exposed to technologies these days means that children are more likely to mature at a younger age. In other words, if back in the days, children' s main concerns were only games and studying, today, they tend to focus more on their social media, posting pictures, hanging out with friends, dressing up, etc. This does not mean that technologies are bad influences. On the contrary, those means of communications and entertainment have helped teens grow more into adults. Facebook is a good example to support this point of view. The trend of using Facebook among young people has partly made teenagers grow and mature more. To sum up, there are many reasons to support the right for teenagers to be in control of their lives. Parents should respect the children opinions and decisions, making rooms for them to be whoever they want.
It is true that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
, age 15 and above, should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
chance to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decisions
without anyone interfering their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
. While
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
might say that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are not well-developed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
choices, others would argue that they are becoming much more mature these days. The purpose of this essay is going to prove that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
have the right to be independent through demonstrating the two main arguments.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
should be free to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
live
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
. By deciding for themselves, they can learn how to become more responsible and thereby grow more.
In addition
, giving them chance to do things at their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
will could enhance the relationship between parents and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
, since there is no forcing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decisions
involved,
therefore
no arguments. For me, ever since my parents have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decisions
on my behalf, I became more free and felt connect with them more.

Possible spelling mistake found.
What&
#039; s more,
being exposed
to technologies these days means that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are more likely to mature at a younger age.
In other words
, if back in the days,
Possible spelling mistake found.
children&
#039; s main concerns were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
games and studying,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
, they tend to focus more on their social media, posting pictures, hanging out with friends, dressing up, etc. This does not mean that technologies are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
influences.
On the contrary
, those means of communications and entertainment have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
teens grow more into adults. Facebook is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
example to support this point of view. The trend of using Facebook among young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
has
partly made
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
grow and mature more.

To sum up, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
reasons to support the right for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
to be in control of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
. Parents should respect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
opinions and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decisions
, making rooms for them to be whoever they want.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Language is the blood of the soul into which thoughts run and out of which they grow.
Oliver Wendell Holmes

IELTS essay Children over 15 should be allowed to make decisions about their lives without the interference of their parents or teachers. Society should accept that children mature at a younger age these days and should adjust the law accordingly. Do you agree or dis v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts