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Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas

Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas jobbp
Creative people can look at things and situations in a novel way and from different angles and perspectives. Another fact is that creativity should come along with no restriction, even by the government; therefore, freedom should be given to the creative artist reasonably. I think they should be free from any boundaries, and I will discuss this point of view in the upcoming paragraph. To Commence with, the artists have their own way of performing arts. Some artists prefer writing novels, journals whereas other artists fancy painting. It not only benefits people but also motivates them. Moreover, artists get help in gaining popularity to the nation because they present their art at national and international level and get name and fame. In this way, it helps to bring fortune to their country. For instance, author Paulo Coelho novels are very thoughtful, one of his book named The Alchemist is the world's bestseller, and many people around the world enjoy reading it. In addition to this, restrictions can affect the livelihoods of artists and if their artwork gets banned they will be unable to earn because art pieces would not get sold out. Due to this, fewer people will opt for artwork. The right to freedom is the basic right that every individual has. So limiting artists thoughts will not help the government in any way. It totally depends on the audience thought process on how they recognise art. To sum up, the government shouldn't judge and limit the freedom of artist base on their thoughts. However, society and people are mature enough to decide what is right and wrong.
Creative
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can look at things and situations
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different
angles and perspectives. Another fact is that creativity should
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come
along with no restriction, even by the
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government
;
therefore
, freedom should be
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given
to the creative
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artist
reasonably
. I
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think
they should be free from any boundaries, and I will discuss this point of view in the upcoming paragraph.

To Commence with, the
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artists
have their
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own
way of performing arts.
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Some
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artists
prefer writing novels, journals whereas other
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artists
fancy painting. It not
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only
benefits
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people
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but
also
motivates them.
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artists
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get
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help
in gaining popularity to the nation
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because
they present their art at national and international level and
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get
name and fame. In this way, it
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helps
to bring fortune to their country.
For instance
, author Paulo
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novels are
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very
thoughtful, one of his book named The Alchemist is the world's bestseller, and
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many
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people
around the world enjoy reading it.

In addition
to this, restrictions can affect the livelihoods of
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artists
and if their artwork
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gets
banned they will be unable to earn
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because
art pieces would not
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get
sold out. Due to this, fewer
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people
will opt for artwork. The right to freedom is the basic right that every individual has.
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So
limiting
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artists
thoughts will not
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help
the
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government
in any way. It
totally
depends on the audience
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thought
process on how they
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recognise
art.

To sum up, the
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government
shouldn't judge and limit the freedom of
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artist
base on their thoughts.
However
, society and
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people
are mature
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enough
to decide what is right and
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wrong
.
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IELTS essay Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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