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Countries should provide enough food for their own people and therefore lessen exportation of food abroad, if needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Countries should provide enough food for their own people and therefore lessen exportation of food abroad, if needed. v. 1
It goes without saying that food is essential for humans to feed on. Some are of the view that countries should prioritize feeding their native citizens from their produced crops over the export of the same. I certainly agree with this view as it is their moral right to consume the product first and only through this can be realistic pricing set in the market. The cogent reason why countries must cater food requirement of their residents first is that they preserve their right to live on the native food items than anyone else. Since the beginning of time, people used to grow the food in their local region and eat the same to sustain. For example, native fishermen of Goa and Kerala have grown up by eating fish as their regular meal and eventually prefer to eat it over any other food choice. Therefore, if we go by the ethics, then native people should be fed first before shipping it to another place. Additionally, another reason is that it would help reduce any price upsurge for natives. This means when exportation happens before addressing the need of the local people, it eventually leads to an imbalance in demand and supply. Thus, it would lead to a high rate of the products grown locally for natives. To cite an example, Saudi Arabia is witnessing an ever-increasing price for dates for native people since they sell up to 80% of the crop to other countries. Therefore, if countries need their crops to remain pocket-friendly to its citizens, then they need to maintain a balance between demand and supply. To conclude, food items are crucial for mankind to survive. This essay has discussed who countries should address the food requirement of native people first as it is their moral right and this may lead to disruptive pricing.
It goes without saying that
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food
is essential for humans to feed on.
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Some
are of the view that
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countries
should prioritize feeding their
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native
citizens from their produced crops over the export of the same. I
certainly
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agree
with this view as it is their moral right to consume the product
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first
and
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only
through this can be realistic pricing set in the market.

The cogent reason why
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countries
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must
cater
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food
requirement of their residents
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first
is that they preserve their right to
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live
on the
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native
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food
items than anyone else. Since the beginning of time,
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people
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used
to grow the
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food
in their local region and eat the same to sustain.
For example
,
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native
fishermen of Goa and Kerala have grown up by eating fish as their regular meal and
eventually
prefer to eat it over any other
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food
choice.
Therefore
, if we go by the ethics, then
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native
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people
should
be fed
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first
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before
shipping it to another place.

Additionally
, another reason is that it would
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help
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reduce
any price upsurge for
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natives
. This means when exportation happens
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before
addressing the need of the local
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people
, it
eventually
leads to an imbalance in demand and supply.
Thus
, it would lead to a high rate of the products grown
locally
for
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natives
. To cite an example, Saudi Arabia is witnessing an ever-increasing price for dates for
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native
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people
since they sell up to 80% of the crop to other
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countries
.
Therefore
, if
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countries
need their crops to remain pocket-friendly to its citizens, then they need to maintain a balance between demand and supply.

To conclude
,
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food
items are crucial for mankind to survive. This essay has discussed who
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countries
should address the
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food
requirement of
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native
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people
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first
as it is their moral right and this may lead to disruptive pricing.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Countries should provide enough food for their own people and therefore lessen exportation of food abroad, if needed. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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