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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in next ten years? How can these problems be overcome v.5

Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in next ten years? How can these problems be overcome v. 5
This fact cannot be denied that with the development and advancement in every sector like technology, education, medicine, etc. All nations are also facing many threats in terms of environment, education and overpopulation at the high rate. This essay will discuss the problems faced by my country in next decade with some viable ways to curb it. There is the plethora of dangers people will face, but the chief among of them is overpopulation. India has become the second highest country of overpopulation. Due to this people will have to face many problems like job and house. Hence, people will become unemployed and frustrated. To overcome their stress, they will start taking the drugs where they use their positive energy in a wrong direction like robbery, murder for their survival. Moreover, there will be contamination of the environment from the emission of an air from traffic, factories and so on. Also, there will be a disposal of waste from factories in the water bodies which leads to many health problems like heart attack, asthma, etc. Overall, it impairs the quality of life and reduces its expectancy. Furthermore, the other major concern will be the non availability of non renewable resources for future, which will lead to stagnation in business. Therefore, there will be a rise in inflation and the economy of the whole nation will be stuck. There are some solutions through which this problem will be reduced. Firstly there should be an international organisation which monitors the usage of non renewable resources of all nations so that these can be retained for future generation. Masses also put efforts to save the environment like use car pooling, energy saving products, reusable products and reduces garbage. Besides this, Authorities also put restrictions on the emission of air and waster disposal from factories and serve the punishment. In conclusion, this problem can be eradicated if decisions about solving problem taken at international level and implemented at the national and individual level. Then, this society will become a better place to live in.
This fact cannot
be denied
that with the development and advancement in every sector like technology, education, medicine, etc. All nations are
also
facing
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many
threats in terms of environment, education and overpopulation at the high rate. This essay will discuss the
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problems
faced by my country in
next
decade with
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some
viable ways to curb it.

There is the plethora of
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dangers
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people
will face,
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but
the chief among of them is overpopulation. India has become the second highest country of overpopulation. Due to this
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people
will
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have to
face
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many
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problems
like job and
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house
.
Hence
,
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people
will become unemployed and frustrated. To overcome their
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stress
, they will
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start
taking the drugs where they
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use
their
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positive
energy in a
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wrong
direction like robbery, murder for their survival.

Moreover
, there will be contamination of the environment from the emission of an air from traffic, factories and
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so
on.
Also
, there will be a disposal of waste from factories in the water bodies which leads to
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many
health
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problems
like heart attack, asthma, etc.
Overall
, it impairs the quality of life and
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reduces
its expectancy.
Furthermore
, the other major concern will be the
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non availability
of
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non renewable
resources for future, which will lead to stagnation in business.
Therefore
, there will be a rise in inflation and the economy of the whole nation will
be stuck
.

There are
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some
solutions through which this
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problem
will be
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reduced
.
Firstly
there should be an international
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organisation
which monitors the usage of
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non renewable
resources of all nations
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so
that these can
be retained
for future generation. Masses
also
put efforts to save the environment like
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use
car pooling, energy saving products, reusable products and
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reduces
garbage.
Besides
this, Authorities
also
put restrictions on the emission of air and waster disposal from factories and serve the punishment.

In conclusion
, this
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problem
can
be eradicated
if decisions about solving
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problem
taken at international level and implemented at the national and individual level. Then, this society will become a better place to
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live
in.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in next ten years? How can these problems be overcome v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
340 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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