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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v.19

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 19
Globalization is rapidly taking over our world as the internet evolves. The similarity among nation is even becoming increasingly accentuated since people are able to purchase the same goods from any part of the globe. This essay is going to support that it is a negative development by analysing the harmful impact globalization has on the different cultures across the world as well as on our environment. The easy access to buy products from other parts of the world is destroying cultural unities and identities since people are replacing their traditional habits for new ones coming from economically dominant nations such as North Americans and Europeans. For example, a recent research shows that in my country people are listening more International songs than Brazilian ones and even the national songs have been added elements from North American music in order to be successful. As a result, the features of our traditional music are fading rapidly and it represents a treat to our culture. Furthermore, the environment is another victim of globalization because consumers often buy online instead of buying from local businesses. By doing this, they leverage the number of shipments. For instance, last year the shipping industry was considered the third industry more polluting in the world due to its enormous release of carbon dioxide to our atmosphere. Thus, it contributes to the intensification of global warming, a major concern among societies around the planet. In conclusion, it is clear that globalization represents a negative development to countries as it undermines cultures and depletes the environment. People should be aware of these facts in order to buy more consciously. Nowadays, we can vote for the future of our nations not only in the elections but also choosing what we purchase.
Globalization is
rapidly
taking over our
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world
as the internet evolves. The similarity among nation is even becoming
increasingly
accentuated since
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people
are able to
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purchase
the same
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goods
from any part of the globe. This essay is going to support that it is a
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negative
development by
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analysing
the harmful impact globalization has on the
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different
cultures across the
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world
as well
as on our environment.

The easy access to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
products from other parts of the
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world
is destroying cultural unities and identities since
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are replacing their traditional habits for new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ones
coming from
economically
dominant nations such as North Americans and Europeans.
For example
, a recent research
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shows
that in my country
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are listening more International songs than Brazilian
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ones
and even the national songs have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
elements from North American music in order to be successful.
As a result
, the features of our traditional music are fading
rapidly
and it represents a treat to our culture.

Furthermore
, the environment is another victim of globalization
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
consumers
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often
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
online
instead
of buying from local businesses. By doing this, they leverage the number of shipments.
For instance
, last year the shipping industry
was considered
the third industry more polluting in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
due to its enormous release of carbon dioxide to our atmosphere.
Thus
, it contributes to the intensification of global warming, a major concern among societies around the planet.

In conclusion
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that globalization represents a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
development to countries as it undermines cultures and depletes the environment.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
should be aware of these facts in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
more
consciously
. Nowadays, we can vote for the future of our nations not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
in the elections
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
choosing what we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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