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Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. v.7

In some part of word, They are using credit and debit cards instead of banknotes and coins, and It was becoming trend of purchase method. On The other hand, Japan still stick to banknotes and coins. Even though many country replacement to use vIrtual money. For example, Japan is the country which is the most economical. They always prefer to use cash. Most of them are still using coin pocket, It’s very common method to save money and it’s more accurate. Also It could prevent corruption of money. using plastic money is saved from over excessive consumption. Therefore risk of using credit card is that It makes us over consuming because we can not feeling directly, when we spend money. It causes corruption of money from government. For example, under the communism virtual money could control by government. citizen is not allow to using their money freely. On the other hand, credit and debit cards are very useful system in term of purchase from online. You can buy everything regardless of the country wherever you are. Also It prevents to lose our money by having money. So I would say it’s very convenience. As a result, It depends on the purpose of consumption. If you don’t mind to spend money then credit card is very comfortable and faster than other method. But If you purpose on saving money then just stop to use credit card and you should consume more carefully.

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instead
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purchase
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 it’s more accurate. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
Also
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prevent
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money
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.Using
using
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money
is saved
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Therefore
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risk
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credit
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card
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makes
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because
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feeling
directly
, when we spend money.

It causes corruption of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
 from This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
. For example
, under the communism virtual You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
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government
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.Citizen
citizen
 is not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 to The verb after “to” should be in the base form: “use”.use
using
 their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
freely
.

On the other hand
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withattention
credit
 and debit You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsheetposterlabelprogramcalendarticket
cards
 are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 useful system Did you mean the commonly used phrase “in terms of”?in terms of
in term of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
 from online. You can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 everything regardless of the country wherever you are. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
Also
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prevents
 to lose our You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
 by having You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 I would say it’s This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 convenience.

As a result
, It depends on the purpose of consumption. If you don’t The verb ‘mind’ is used with the gerund form: “mind spending”.mind spending
mind to spend
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money
 then You use this word too often, consider replacing it withattention
credit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsheetposterlabelprogramcalendarticket
card
 is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 comfortable and faster than other method. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 If you purpose on saving You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
 then This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :terminateceasediscontinue
stop
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withattention
credit
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).card, and
card and
 you should consume more carefully
. 