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Could you suggest some reasons why some people are deciding to reduce their use of technology?

Could you suggest some reasons why some people are deciding to reduce their use of technology? MoQyQ

I think people are starting to realize the limitations and harmful effects of technology. Internet addiction is a scary problem and this usually happens to the young generations, they seem to feel joy in the unrealistic world rather than the outside world so they end up spending hours for it. It’s been scientific approval that overuse of the internet may lead to dangerous pathogens in the brain. Diminish the technology usage help us reconnect with our real lives and reduce the risk of disease

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 us reconnect with our real This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
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IELTS essay Could you suggest some reasons why some people are deciding to reduce their use of technology?

Essay

American English

1 paragraphs

83 words

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4.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

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Lexical Resource: 6.5

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Grammatical Range: 5.5

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Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.5

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