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Considering that adults spend much of their lives at work, having job satisfaction is extremely important. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is that job satisfaction for all employees.

Considering that adults spend much of their lives at work, having job satisfaction is extremely important. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is that job satisfaction for all employees. 9Y6k0
Being contented and satisfied with our job is significantly important considering almost the days our lives were being spent at work. Having said that, job satisfaction is not easy to obtain. This essay will expand two important factors that contributes to the an enjoyable job which were working environment and your passion of what you are performing everyday as well as will argue that not every employee could say they are satisfied with their jobs. when you are completely satisfied with your job, it feels like your not exhausted even after all the loads that are piled up for us to accomplish. if you are surrounded and tightly united with colleagues, a working environment having people who supports each other to continually grow as a person, empower everyone to be the best version of ourselves and considerate of personal or social status, i firmly believe that job satisfaction will be easily attained. For example, a call center agent on a straight graveyard shift the whole week but with an optimistic team set to achieve one fixed goal as a whole, will never feel stressed but satisfied. Another factor is our passion for what we are doing. when we love what we are performing that we look forward to it everyday like it's one of the reasons for our happiness, then we are satisfied with our job. For example is a a nurse whose on 16-hour shift with a need to an hourly monitoring for all his patients and continuously updating the attending physician with the status of their patients can be so exhausted and stressed at the end of the day, but because he loves what he do, he is passionate of helping people recover, he is satisfied. in reality, not everyone are satisfied with their jobs as life is not as smooth as we wanted. There are adults who barely can finish a 2-year contract with their employers and also employees who are just doing their jobs for financial reasons without job satisfaction taking into account.
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with our
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is
significantly
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important
considering almost the days our
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lives
were
being spent
at work. Having said that,
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job
satisfaction is not easy to obtain. This essay will expand two
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important
factors that contributes to
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the an
enjoyable
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job
which were working environment and your passion of what you are performing
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everyday
as well
as will argue that not every employee could say they are
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satisfied
with their jobs.

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when
you are completely
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satisfied
with your
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job
, it feels like your not exhausted even
after all
the loads that
are piled
up for us to accomplish.
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if
you
are surrounded
and
tightly
united with colleagues, a working environment having
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people
who
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supports
each other to
continually
grow as a person, empower everyone to be the best version of ourselves and considerate of personal or social status,
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i
firmly
believe that
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job
satisfaction will be
easily
attained.
For example
, a call center agent on a straight graveyard shift the whole week
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but
with an optimistic team set to achieve one
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fixed
goal as a whole, will never feel
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stressed
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but
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satisfied
. Another factor is our passion for what we are doing.
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when
we
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love
what we are performing that we look forward to it everyday like it's one of the reasons for our happiness, then we are
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satisfied
with our
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job
.
For example
is
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a a
nurse whose on 16-hour shift with a need to an hourly monitoring for all his patients and
continuously
updating the attending physician with the status of their patients can be
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so
exhausted and
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stressed
at the
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end
of the day,
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but
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because
he
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loves
what he
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do
, he is passionate of helping
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people
recover, he
is satisfied
.

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in
reality, not everyone
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are
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satisfied
with their
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jobs
as life is not as smooth as we wanted. There are adults who
barely
can finish a 2-year contract with their employers and
also
employees who are
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just
doing their
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jobs
for financial reasons without
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job
satisfaction taking into account.
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IELTS essay Considering that adults spend much of their lives at work, having job satisfaction is extremely important. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is that job satisfaction for all employees.

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3 paragraphs
337 words
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