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You are concerned about the progress of a student in your class. Write to the Principal requesting for a meeting with him/her and the student. Explain why you want the meeting.

You are concerned about the progress of a student in your class. Write to the Principal requesting for a meeting with him/her and the student. Explain why you want the meeting. o1b2b
The Principal. Hobart High School, 1 Davey Street, Hobart, Tasmania. 5th December, 2021 Requesting an appointment for a meeting to discuss the learning progress of John Dear Mr. Scott, I am writing this letter to you to request a meeting with you and my student, John White, for the reason of his learning progress. John is a new immigrant and he enrolled to my class last term. He is a hardworking student and makes a great effect on his studying. However, I find that he has some difficulties in following the instructions of teachers. Because of this issue, I have taught to his parents and finally figure out that his English level may not be sufficient to communicate with teachers and other classmates. Due to this reason, I am wondering if we can have a meeting to discuss his learning progress and the possibility of providing him some English tutorials so that we can help him to catch up quickly. If you need further information about this student, please feel free to contact me and I am looking forwards to hearing from you soon. Thank you very much. Kind regards, Encore Li
The Principal.

Hobart High School,

1
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Davey
Street, Hobart, Tasmania.

5th
When specifying a month and year, the comma is unnecessary: "December 2021".
December, 2021


Requesting an appointment for a meeting to discuss the learning progress of John

Dear Mr. Scott,

I am writing this letter to you to request a meeting with you and my student, John White, for the reason of his learning progress.

John is a new
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
immigrant and
The usual collocation for "enrolled" is "in" (a school) or "for" (a course). Did you mean "he enrolled in" or "he enrolled for"?
he enrolled to
my
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class
last term. He is a hardworking student and
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makes
a great effect on his studying.
However
, I find that he has
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some
difficulties in following the instructions of teachers.
Because of this
issue, I have taught to his parents and
finally
figure out that his English level may not be sufficient to communicate with teachers and other classmates. Due to this reason, I am wondering if we can have a meeting to discuss his learning progress and the possibility of providing him
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
English tutorials
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so
that we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
him to catch up
quickly
.

If you need
further
information about this student,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
feel free to contact
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
me and
I am looking forwards to hearing from you
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soon
. Thank you
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very
much.

Kind regards,

Encore Li
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IELTS essay You are concerned about the progress of a student in your class. Write to the Principal requesting for a meeting with him/her and the student. Explain why you want the meeting.

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