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Both the reading and the lecture talk about considering high taxes for cigarettes and unhealthy foods. The author of the excerpt is of the opinion that the raising in the cost of cigarettes and unhealthy foods provides us with several social benefits and discuss three of them. Nonetheless, all of the benefits mentioned in the article are challengeable in the professor's eyes, accordingly, she denies all of them by providing some explanation. First and foremost, according to the author of the reading, such a consideration via government can prevent people from an unhealthy diet. However, the professor in the lecture refutes this claim by stating that in such a situation addicted individuals will not cut off smoking, rather they will buy cheaper cigarettes all of which cause more harmful atmosphere in a society since they are in a lower quality than expensive ones. In addition, he says that people will not change their food habits, so they will buy unhealthy food. Consequently, they will encounter with less remained money to spend on healthy foods. The author of the article further asserts that such a decision is really fair for people, since eventually, all people must accept the same cost of living; either smokers who make pollutant in air and cause diseases for all people, or the rest of people that are forced to consider cost to their diseases brought by unhealthy behavior of smokers. Nevertheless, the professor in the lecture rebuts this implication by referring to the discrimination between people with higher income and people with lower income. In fact, in such a condition, individuals with low revenue will be faced with more difficulties to buy cigarettes or unhealthy foods. The author of the excerpt lasting insists that an increase in taxes of such products and foods gives governments a good chance to use their great revenue of such taxes to do some beneficial projects. In this way, all dwellers will benefit. In contrast, the professor denies this idea by saying that the governments now can adopt regulations to prevent the harmful effect of such products on people, for instance
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foods
. The
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author
of the excerpt is of the opinion that the raising in the cost of
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cigarettes
and
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unhealthy
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foods
provides us with several social benefits and discuss three of them. Nonetheless,
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all of the
benefits mentioned in the article are
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challengeable
in the professor's eyes,
accordingly
, she denies all of them by providing
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some
explanation.

First
and foremost, according to the
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author
of the reading, such a consideration via
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government
can
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prevent
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people
from an
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unhealthy
diet.
However
, the professor in the lecture refutes this claim by stating that in such a situation addicted individuals will not
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cut
off smoking,
rather
they will
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buy
cheaper
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cigarettes
all of which cause more harmful atmosphere in a society since they are in a lower quality than expensive ones.
In addition
, he says that
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people
will not
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change
their
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food
habits,
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so
they will
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buy
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unhealthy
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food
.
Consequently
, they will encounter with less remained money to spend on healthy foods.

The
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author
of the article
further
asserts that such a decision is
really
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fair
for
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people
, since
eventually
, all
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people
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must
accept the same cost of living; either smokers who
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make
pollutant in air and cause diseases for all
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people
, or the rest of
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people
that
are forced
to consider cost to their diseases brought by
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unhealthy
behavior of smokers.
Nevertheless
, the professor in the lecture rebuts this implication by referring to the discrimination between
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people
with higher income and
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people
with lower income. In fact, in such a condition, individuals with low revenue will
be faced
with more difficulties to
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buy
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cigarettes
or
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unhealthy
foods.

The
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author
of the excerpt lasting insists that an increase in taxes of such products and
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foods
gives
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governments
a
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good
chance to
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use
their great revenue of such taxes to do
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some
beneficial projects. In this way, all dwellers will benefit.
In contrast
, the professor denies this
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idea
by saying that the
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governments
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now
can adopt regulations to
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prevent
the harmful effect of such products on
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people
, for
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IELTS essay considering high taxes for cigarettes and unhealthy foods

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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