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conputers and internet are important in children study ,other think that children can study more in school with teachers. Explain both the views with your opinion.

conputers and internet are important in children study, other think that children can study more in school with teachers. Explain both the views with your opinion. JoB7D
In the modern era, Technology has made the life convenient. It is argument of some masses that computers and internet are crucial in learners study. However, many people think pupils can study more in school with teachers. This essay will highlight both the views with my opinion of this concern in upcoming paragraphs. To embark on, computers and internet are quite beneficial for the development of children. Firstly, they can easily search any information at any time on internet. They can enhance their sheer knowledge through computers. Secondly, learners should study with the help of computer and internet because they can save their valuable time and increase their vocabulary skills through internet. It can be seen that in India, during covid pandemic, School classes were attended by learners in an online way, which became extremely useful at that time. Therefor, children can make their future because they can learn that how to use computer as they might be work in multinational company in future. On the other hand children should study in school with their teacher which can become beneficial for their study. Firstly, with the help of teachers children can easily understand anything because teachers have knowledge of all subject. They can more concentrate on their study. Secondly, they can share any problem with their teacher, when they find any difficulty. Because teachers have lot of patience as they are able that how to Solve any trouble. For instance, in foreign Nations, it is the rule for every students to attend weekdays classes of school so that they can take classes from teachers. Hence, students might be getten high score in their class. In conclusion by exploring all the aspect it it is evident that student should study with teachers as well as by using computer because thes things are beneficial for the growth of the children but teachers and parents must ensure that children do not misuse of computer.
In the modern era, Technology has made the life convenient. It is argument of
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some
masses that computers and internet are crucial in learners
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study
.
However
,
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many
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people
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think
pupils can
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study
more in
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school
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
. This essay will highlight both the views with my opinion of this concern in upcoming paragraphs.

To embark on, computers and internet are quite beneficial for the development of
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children
.
Firstly
, they can
easily
search any information at any time on internet. They can enhance their sheer knowledge through computers.
Secondly
, learners should
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study
with the
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help
of computer and internet
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because
they can save their valuable time and increase their vocabulary
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skills
through internet. It can be
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seen
that in India, during
Did you mean "COVID-19" or the alternative spelling "Covid-19" (= coronavirus)?
covid
pandemic,
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School
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classes
were attended
by learners
Consider replacing "in an online way" with the adverb for "online"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an online way
, which became
extremely
useful at that time. Therefor,
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children
can
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make
their future
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because
they can learn that how to
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use
computer as they might be work in multinational
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company
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in future
.

On the other hand
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children
should
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study
in
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school
with their
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teacher
which can become beneficial for their
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study
.
Firstly
, with the
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help
of
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teachers
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children
can
easily
understand anything
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because
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teachers
have knowledge of all subject. They can more concentrate on their
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study
.
Secondly
, they can share any problem with their
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teacher
, when they find any difficulty.
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Because
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teachers
have
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lot of
patience as they are able that how to Solve any trouble.
For instance
, in foreign Nations, it is the
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rule
for every
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students
to attend weekdays
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classes
of
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school
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so
that they can take
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classes
from
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teachers
.
Hence
, students might be
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getten
high score in their
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class
.
In conclusion
by exploring all the aspect
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it it
is evident that student should
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study
with
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teachers
as well
as by using computer
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because
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thes
things are beneficial for the growth of the
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children
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but
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teachers
and parents
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must
ensure that
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children
do not misuse of computer.
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IELTS essay conputers and internet are important in children study, other think that children can study more in school with teachers. Explain both the views with your opinion.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
321 words
5.5
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