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Computersimran are being used more more in the school. Some people think it is postive development while others think it is negative development. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Computersimran are being used more more in the school. Some people think it is postive development while others think it is negative development. lqxPb
Education, also as the third eye of human, is crucial for everyone to become successful in their coming times. Computer are using on a large extent in education organisations. It is believed by some individuals that it is a positive trend, whereas many people think if can lead some negative results. In my perspective, both sides have their own values which will be used in the upcoming paragraphs. Undoubtedly, the use of electronic devices is beneficial for the students in many ways. The prominent one is time saving. To clarify this, computer is considered as source of information and scholars can use this device any time in order to take information regarding any topic, instead ofor going outside in the libraries. In this way, juveniles may save their precious time which can be wasted if they go out. Instead of this, educate can use computers for their online classes that is fruitful for students in any kind of mishappening. For instance, during the last year when cases of covid -19 was increasing everywhere in the world then electronic devices proved beneficial for students because with the help of online classes educate remained in touch with their study. On the paradoxical side, the use of computers for students may be harmful in many ways. The first and foremost negative impact is health issue. To clarify this, excessive use of computers might lead negative results such as weakening of eyesight when students use computer screen for longer hours. Apart from this, sometimes students become habitual of spending lots of their time in front of computer screen and they do not prefer to enjoy with the family members which can lead the decreasing of intimate relations with their family members. To encapsulate, although use of electronic device has many positive effects in the life of students but it's negative impactside also cannot be neglected by the individualsame.
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also
as the third eye of human, is crucial for everyone to become successful in their coming
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times
. Computer are using on a large extent in education
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organisations
. It
is believed
by
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some
individuals that it is a
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positive
trend, whereas
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many
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people
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think
if can lead
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some
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negative
results. In my perspective, both sides have their
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own
values which will be
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used
in the upcoming paragraphs.

Undoubtedly
, the
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use
of electronic
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devices
is beneficial for the
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students
in
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many
ways. The prominent one is
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time
saving. To clarify this, computer
is considered
as source of information and scholars can
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use
this
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device
any
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time
in order to take information regarding any topic,
instead
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ofor
going outside in the libraries. In this way, juveniles may save their precious
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time
which can
be wasted
if they go out.
Instead
of this, educate can
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use
computers for their online classes
that is
fruitful for
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students
in any kind of
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mishappening
.
For instance
, during the last year when cases of
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covid
-19 was increasing everywhere in the world then electronic
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devices
proved beneficial for
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students
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because
with the
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help
of online classes educate remained in touch with their study.

On the paradoxical side, the
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use
of computers for
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students
may be harmful in
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many
ways. The
first
and foremost
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negative
impact is health issue. To clarify this, excessive
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use
of computers might lead
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negative
results such as weakening of eyesight when
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students
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use
computer screen for longer hours. Apart from this,
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sometimes
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students
become habitual of spending lots of their
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time
in front of computer
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screen and
they do not prefer to enjoy with the family members which can lead the decreasing of intimate relations with their family members.

To encapsulate, although
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use
of electronic
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device
has
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many
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positive
effects in the life of
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students
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but
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negative
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by the
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IELTS essay Computersimran are being used more more in the school. Some people think it is postive development while others think it is negative development.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6.0
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