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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Q3LX
Nowadays, people are entirely dependent on computers or any type of technology. Some people think that lessons or programs related to computers should be included in schools curriculum also for teaching purposes but on the other hand, others think that fully consumed by computers can be risky for students. I believe that learning and using computers for teaching is a great way of expanding knowlegde especially for students. However, digital learning is known as the second best way of teaching students with creativity that results good grades. The connection using computers between teachers and their pupils is really important because its the best trick of learning. For instance, by just having a computer and wifi it is piece of cake to connect with the students even though they are at home. In addition, schools can update their ways of teaching by being creative using power points and also instead of school supplies, doing assignments by microsoft office is way eco-friendly. Moreover, being healthy is not just done by eating nutritious food but also taking care of body parts like eyes. Computers provide levels of brightness that affects the eye sight which will be hard for any school members not to wear eye glasses for protection. For example, too much light exposure can weaken the eye sight of young students and it won't be easy for anyone to focus. To conclude, technology is a powerful source that we have on earth. Computers will be a great example for being environmentally friendly also its affordable plus useful.
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entirely
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people
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think
that lessons or programs related to computers should
be included
in
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schools
curriculum
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for
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teaching
purposes
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but
on the other hand
, others
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think
that
fully
consumed by computers can be risky for
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students
. I believe that learning and using computers for
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teaching
is a great way of expanding
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knowlegde
especially
for students.

However
, digital learning
is known
as the second best way of
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teaching
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students
with creativity that results
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good
grades. The connection using computers between teachers and their pupils is
really
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important
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because
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its
the best trick of learning.
For instance
, by
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just
having a computer and
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wifi
it is
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piece
of cake to connect with the
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students
even though
they are at home.
In addition
,
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schools
can update their ways of
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teaching
by being creative using power points and
also
instead
of
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school
supplies, doing assignments by
Did you mean the proper noun "Microsoft Office" (= Microsoft product)?
microsoft office
is way eco-friendly.

Moreover
, being healthy is not
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just
done by eating nutritious food
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but
also
taking care of body parts like
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eyes
. Computers provide levels of brightness that affects the
This word is usually spelt together: "eyesight".
eye sight
which will be
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hard
for any
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school
members not to wear
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eye
glasses for protection.
For example
, too much light exposure can weaken the
This word is usually spelt together: "eyesight".
eye sight
of young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
and it won't be easy for anyone to focus.

To conclude
, technology is a powerful source that we have on earth. Computers will be a great example for being
environmentally
friendly
also
its affordable plus useful.
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IELTS essay Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students.

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