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Computers are everywhere and with this increased dependence on computers, some people suspect that it might cause us some issues in future. Give your opinion.

Computers are everywhere and with this increased dependence on computers, some people suspect that it might cause us some issues in future. Give your opinion. bYx0Q
There arises no question over the verity of the statement that computers have sneaked into human lives and, perhaps, enjoy an indispensable place in the same. An opinion in this regard, put forward by a cluster of like-minded people, is that such a dependence is precarious and might get people into trouble. Indeed, I could not agree more on it owing to some well established facts that would be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. An assertion by the proponents of this view is that technology, being a double-edge sword, might go against it's own creator, the human. Not venturing out with people at social places and sticking to virtual world that thrives over various platforms including work, addictive video games, web TV(Netflix) et cetera leads a person to solitudeness. Worth mentioning is the fact that isolation is learnt to be one of the major reasons behind weakening mental as well as emotional health, frustration, depression and other disorders. Ubiquitous Practice of touch tone dialing systems and automated teller machines have eliminated the need of face to face interactions and therefore, are being blamed for reducing the emotions that people carry and slowly turning them to programmed machines. Besides, it may be added that it is not only the cognitive health that is exposed to get worsen by excessive reliance over computers as physical wellbeing also suffers owing to reduced bodily movements and, indeed, an inactive lifestyle. It would be safe to remark that instead of working in favor of humans, the computers are making people redundant and is rapidly outshining people at scores of jobs. Given the speed at which computer technology and human reliance is growing, prediction can be made of those days when unemployment would touch unprecedented heights. At last, it can be summed up that no doubt citizens all over the world enjoy tremendous benefits that computers and relatable technology deliver but as "having too much of anything have consequences", I would like to reiterate that this obsession with artificial intelligence is wary and could make humans suffer the most.
There arises no question
over
the verity of the statement that computers have sneaked into
human
lives
and, perhaps, enjoy an indispensable place in the same. An opinion in this regard, put forward by a cluster of like-minded
people
, is that such a dependence is precarious and might
get
people
into trouble.
Indeed
, I could not
agree
more on it owing to
some
well established facts that would
be discussed
in the upcoming paragraphs.

An assertion by the proponents of this view is that technology, being a double-edge sword, might go against
it's
own
creator, the
human
. Not venturing out with
people
at social places and sticking to virtual world that thrives
over
various platforms including work, addictive video games, web TV(Netflix)
et cetera
leads a person to
solitudeness
. Worth mentioning is the fact that isolation is
learnt
to be one of the major reasons behind weakening mental
as well
as emotional health, frustration, depression and other disorders. Ubiquitous Practice of touch tone dialing systems and automated teller machines have eliminated the need of face to face interactions and
therefore
, are
being blamed
for reducing the emotions that
people
carry and
slowly
turning them to programmed machines.

Besides
, it may be
added
that it is not
only
the cognitive health that
is exposed
to
get
worsen by excessive reliance
over
computers as physical
wellbeing
also
suffers owing to
reduced
bodily
movements and,
indeed
, an inactive lifestyle. It would be safe to remark that
instead
of working in favor of
humans
, the computers are making
people
redundant and is
rapidly
outshining
people
at scores of jobs.
Given
the speed at which computer technology and
human
reliance is growing, prediction can
be made
of those days when unemployment would touch unprecedented heights.

At last, it can
be summed
up that no doubt citizens all
over
the world enjoy tremendous benefits that computers and relatable technology deliver
but
as
"
having too much of anything have consequences
"
, I would like to reiterate that this obsession with artificial intelligence is wary and could
make
humans
suffer the most.
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IELTS essay Computers are everywhere and with this increased dependence on computers, some people suspect that it might cause us some issues in future. Give your opinion.

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