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computers are being used more in education some people think it has the many benefits while there are some people who says uses of computers in education has negative results discuss both views and give your opinion

computers are being used more in education some people think it has the many benefits while there are some people who says uses of computers in education has negative results discuss both views and give your opinion Oy86p
The first and foremost is lack of confidence in students because of computer. Students are not responded in online studies they are not answer any question as a result they lost their confidence. On the other hand there are many benefits of computers in education. Students get books from any site so they want they want a need to to buy books. However they found many books for one subject and they download that books free for any cost. As a result there are no need to spend extra money on books. Secondly in computers there a lot of knowledge for students to learn anything from here. For example Wikipedia website have great knowledge about study. So students get information about any topic from internet.
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benefits of computers in education.
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Students
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books
from any site
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for one
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they download that
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free for any cost.
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a result there are no need to spend extra money on
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Secondly
in computers there
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a lot of
knowledge for
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to learn anything from here.
For example
Wikipedia website have great knowledge about study.
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So
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students
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get
information about any topic from internet.

IELTS essay computers are being used more in education some people think it has the many benefits while there are some people who says uses of computers in education has negative results discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
125 words
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