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Computers are being used more and more in education and so there will soon be no role for the teacher in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Computers are being used more and more in education and so there will soon be no role for the teacher in education. v. 1
Nowadays, the debate whether numbers of males and females should be equal in every subject or not has caused a ruckus among myriads of students and professors at universities. Those who are in favour of accepting equal numbers of males and females believe that it will help students feel more comfortable because they will not feel different among their colleagues; however opponents disagree-claiming that it is superfluous to focus on their gender and rather focus on their academic level and qualifications so the question is whether universities should take this point into consideration while filtering the applicants or not? This essay will discuss to what extend do agree or disagree about this debatable topic. Regarding this disputatious issue there is a vast plethora of cons. First and foremost applicants should be fairly chosen upon their academic level and qualifications only. That is to say that why would a male or a female has a greater probability of being accepted just because of their gender? Not only does this ignites the feeling of unfairness among students, but also another better student than who is being accepted will be sacrificed and without negotiation it will worsen the university’s reputation. Another equally important benefit is that it may coerce students to socialize to have new friends. Despite the fact that students may want their friends at the beginning, it will ignite their communication skills and let them pop their bubble to get out of their comfort zone. Despite the obvious negatives, one cannot turn a blind eye on the incontestable positives. The first and the most salient merit is that students may feel more comfortable. For example, if a student was the only female in her class, she may feel unsatisfied and maybe even she will not be able to concentrate sharply due to their loud noise. Furthermore, another pro is that even though applicants should be accepted upon the criteria being met, keeping an eye on the percentage of males as opposed to females should be noticed in order not to seem supporting a specific gender more than the other. To put things together, is there really such a big need for keeping males and females equally accepted in universities or not? I fervently acquiesce that fairness is the bedrock of success that is why I resolutely state that any student who meet the specific criteria needed should be accepted regardless their gender. On the other hand, I recommend involving all these sides together to come up with activities to tackle problems of being left out!
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males
and
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females
should be equal in every subject or not has caused a ruckus among myriads of
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students
and professors at
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universities
. Those who are in
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favour
of accepting equal numbers of
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males
and
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females
believe that it will
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help
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students
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feel
more comfortable
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because
they will not
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feel
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different
among their colleagues;
however
opponents disagree-claiming that it is superfluous to focus on their gender and
rather
focus on their academic level and qualifications
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so
the question is whether
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universities
should take this point into consideration while filtering the applicants or not? This essay will discuss to what
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extend
do
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agree
or disagree about this debatable topic.

Regarding this disputatious issue there is a vast plethora of cons.
First
and foremost applicants should be
fairly
chosen upon their academic level and qualifications
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only
.
That is
to say that why would a male or a
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female
has a greater probability of being
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accepted
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just
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because
of their gender? Not
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only
does this
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ignites
the feeling of unfairness among
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students
,
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but
also
another better
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student
than who is being
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accepted
will
be sacrificed
and without negotiation it will worsen the
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university’s
reputation. Another
equally
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important
benefit is that it may coerce
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students
to socialize to have new friends. Despite the fact that
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students
may want their friends at the beginning, it will ignite their communication
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skills
and
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let
them pop their bubble to
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get
out of their comfort zone.

Despite the obvious negatives, one cannot turn a blind eye on the incontestable positives. The
first
and the most salient merit is that
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students
may
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feel
more comfortable.
For example
, if a
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student
was the
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only
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female
in her
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class
, she may
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feel
unsatisfied and maybe even she will not be able to concentrate
sharply
due to their loud noise.
Furthermore
, another pro is that
even though
applicants should be
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accepted
upon the criteria
being met
, keeping an eye on the percentage of
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males
as opposed to
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females
should
be noticed
in order not to seem supporting a specific gender more than the other.

To put things together, is there
really
such a
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big
need for keeping
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males
and
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females
equally
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accepted
in
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universities
or not? I
fervently
acquiesce that fairness is the bedrock of success
that is
why I
resolutely
state that any
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student
who
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meet
the specific criteria needed should be
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accepted
regardless their gender.
On the other hand
, I recommend involving all these sides together to
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come
up with activities to tackle problems of being
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left
out!
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Computers are being used more and more in education and so there will soon be no role for the teacher in education. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
424 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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