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computers are becoming an essential for education. what are the advantages and disadvanteges of this trend

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Nowadays, computers are more and more popular in many fields such as science, technology and education. Computers have a vital role in education because they are convenient and support a lot of things for students. There are have a lot of advantages and disadvantages for this matter and I will adress the reasons for my views as follow. The main benefit is that student can join in many online classes by computers if they cannot go to offline class. Moreover, pupils can find many information in the Internet by gadgets to enrich the knowledge. For example, after school day, students can study the lesson which they do not understand and they can search many information to prepare for the next lesson. However, this matter do not completely beneficial. There are some drawbacks of using computer by students. The serious disadvantage is that students are depend on the Internet a lots that influence on their's create ability. For instance, undergraduates usually use computer to copy the poem and story of others to have a good mark. Furthermore, students spend a lot of time to kick back and relax such as playing games, using social media and this make study result decrease. Thus, parents should observe their kid and make sure that they use computer for studying. In conclusion, I think that the advantages are greater than disadvantages of computers are becoming an essential part of education. People should use computer suitable for work, study, and research. In education, government should give many methods to make students study better and create more study app for student.
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many
fields such as science, technology and
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education
. Computers have a vital role in
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education
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because
they are convenient and support a
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lot
of things for
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students
. There are
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have
a
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lot
of advantages and disadvantages for this matter and I will
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adress
the reasons for my views
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as follow
.

The main benefit is that
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student
can
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join
in
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many
online classes by computers if they cannot go to offline
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class
.
Moreover
, pupils can find
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many information
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in the Internet
by gadgets to enrich the knowledge.
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, after school day,
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students
can
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study
the lesson which they do not
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understand and
they can search
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many information
to prepare for the
next
lesson.

However
, this matter do not completely beneficial. There are
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drawbacks of using computer by
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students
. The serious disadvantage is that
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students
are
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depend
on the Internet a
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lots
that influence on
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their's
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create
ability.
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, undergraduates
usually
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use
computer to copy the poem and story of others to have a
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good
mark.
Furthermore
,
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students
spend a
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of time to kick back and relax such as playing games, using social media and this
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make
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study
result decrease.
Thus
, parents should observe their kid and
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make
sure that they
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use
computer for studying.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that the advantages are greater than disadvantages of computers are becoming an essential part of
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education
.
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People
should
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use
computer suitable for work,
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study
, and research. In
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education
,
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government
should give
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many
methods to
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students
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study
better and create more
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app for
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student
.
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IELTS essay computers are becoming an essential for education. what are the advantages and disadvanteges of this trend

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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