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Completing university education is through to be the best way to get a job. To what extent do you agree

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Someone believe that university is the most important path to have a satisfied work in the future. In my opinion, university education can be required for finding job but it is not the best way. It is true to said that studying university education is necessary for job seeking. The first reason is because a college degree will make a good profile for applying to the company. The graduated students from university can have more change to be received by employers Another reason is that knowledge gained from university is essential for work. Every job is require to have certain specialized knowledge about major work. The university will train students to have the suitable science and skill for their dream job. However, a college degree is not the most opportunities to have a satisfied job. Firstly, many graduated students that still jobless because of many objective factors. For instance, in spite of having the knowledges, solf-skills such as community, technology, etc, . . are also necessary for finding job. Moreover, there are many ways to find an employment. People can find many chance for their job by another certifications or personal cultivation. In conclusion, it can be said that completing tertiary education is the short way to have a job, but it is not the best guarantee path. To seek a satisfied employment, it is also depend on many factors and the most important element is the seeker's cultivation.
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that
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university
is the most
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important
path to have a satisfied work in the future. In my opinion,
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university
education can
be required
for finding
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job
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but
it is not the best way. It is true to said that studying
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university
education is necessary for
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job
seeking. The
first
reason is
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because
a college degree will
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make
a
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good
profile for applying to the
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company
. The graduated students from
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university
can have more
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change
to
be received
by employers Another reason is that knowledge gained from
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university
is essential for work. Every
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job
is
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require
to have certain specialized knowledge about major work. The
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university
will train students to have the suitable science and
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skill
for their dream job.

However
, a college degree is not the most opportunities to have a satisfied
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job
.
Firstly
,
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many
graduated students that
still
jobless
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because
of
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objective factors.
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having the
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knowledges
, solf-
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skills
such as community, technology, etc
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are
also
necessary for finding
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job
.
Moreover
, there are
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many
ways to find an employment.
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People
can find
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for their
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job
by another certifications or personal cultivation.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
that completing tertiary education is the short way to have a
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job
,
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but
it is not the best guarantee path. To seek a satisfied employment, it is
also
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on
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many
factors and the most
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important
element is the seeker's cultivation.
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IELTS essay Completing university education is through to be the best way to get a job. To what extent do you agree

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