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Comparison between domestic news and international news

Comparison between domestic news and international news paD33
Recently, there has been a controversy between some people who are in favour of domestic news and those who prefer international news. Although these both opinions are based on reasonable basic, I take the view that people should pay more attention to information in their country. On one hand, news around the world are beneficial to some extent. In particular, in our daily life, we are provided with a various number of information ranging from environment to health, thereby, we are aware of what are hot issues and prepare ourselves for dealing with their impacts. For example, news concerning environmental pollution, climate change, global warming…tend to raise our awareness and enhance our responsibility as a global citizen. The Covid situation in many parts of the world keep us informed about a serious pandemic from which we have to learn how to stay ourselves away. On the other hand, I personally believe that national news should take priority over the world news. Keeping up with outstanding events within the country is not only a right but also a responsibility of every citizen. As being a part of the society where we are living, we need to be well informed about the domestic politics, economy and labour market. This equips us with essential information for our better life. For instance, news about (regarding, concerning, related to) labour market gives us more opportunities to apply for our potential jobs. In conclusion, being exposed to either international news or national news is advantageous. However, it is what happen in our country every day that we need to focus on.
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some
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people
who are in
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favour
of domestic
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news
and those who prefer international
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news
. Although these both opinions
are based
on reasonable basic, I take the view that
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people
should pay more attention to information in their country.

On one hand,
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news
around the world are beneficial to
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some
extent.
In particular
, in our daily life, we
are provided
with a various number of information ranging from environment to health, thereby, we are aware of what are hot issues and prepare ourselves for dealing with their impacts.
For example
,
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news
concerning environmental pollution, climate
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change
, global warming…tend to raise our awareness and enhance our responsibility as a global citizen. The
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Covid
situation in
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many
parts of the world
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keep
us informed about a serious pandemic from which we
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have to
learn how to stay ourselves away.

On the other hand
, I
personally
believe that national
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news
should take priority over the world
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news
. Keeping up with outstanding
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events
within the country is not
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only
a right
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but
also
a responsibility of every citizen. As being a part of the society where we are living, we need to be
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well informed
about the domestic politics, economy and
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labour
market. This equips us with essential information for our better life.
For instance
,
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news
about (regarding, concerning, related to)
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labour
market gives us more opportunities to apply for our potential jobs.

In conclusion
,
being exposed
to either international
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news
or national
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news
is advantageous.
However
, it is what happen in our country every day that we need to focus on.
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IELTS essay Comparison between domestic news and international news

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