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number of CFC emissions in 1989-2001 in four countries

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Poland had the biggest quantity of emission with 5000 metric tons in 1989. However, in the following years, these figures dropped sharply. Whereas in Poland, the amount of emission fell steadily to a low point of approximately 200 metric tons in 2001; in Ukraine, there was a sharp decline in emitting gases, reaching a point of less than 1000 metric tons and then went up slightly until 2001 with about 1100 metric tons. Meanwhile, Malaysia and Egypt had lower emission levels than Poland and Ukraine in 1989; but these figures were higher than other countries in 2001. From 1989 to 1995, Malaysia’s emission level remained constant at about 3500 metric tons before it decreased gradually. At the same time, there was a steady decrease in emission between 1989 and 2001 in Egypt.
Poland had the biggest quantity of
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with 5000 metric tons in 1989.
However
, in the following years, these figures dropped
sharply
. Whereas in Poland, the amount of
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fell
steadily
to a low point of approximately 200 metric tons in 2001; in Ukraine, there was a sharp decline in emitting gases, reaching a point of less than 1000 metric tons and then went up
slightly
until 2001 with about 1100 metric tons.

Meanwhile, Malaysia and Egypt had lower
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levels than Poland and Ukraine in 1989;
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these figures were higher than other countries in 2001. From 1989 to 1995, Malaysia’s
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level remained constant at about 3500 metric tons
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it decreased
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. At the same time, there was a steady decrease in
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between 1989 and 2001 in Egypt.
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IELTS essay number of CFC emissions in 1989-2001 in four countries

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