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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. v.12

Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. v. 12
In today's world, various media and our dependency on them have become quite significant in our life. I believe media like television, radio, book, film, theatre and comics have different advantages and disadvantages as they have subtle differences in the way they convey a message and communicate information. The discussion about the positive and negative aspects of three media- TV, radio and books, will be explained followed by my opinion about the most effective medium and finally, a rational conclusion will be drawn. First of all, as a modern medium, television has become a part of human life. Most people nowadays have this medium as the tool to get useful information. Even for entertainment, they rely on their TV sets. There is scarcely any house that does not own a TV set. However, it can make people passive, as the viewers just sit on their chairs to watch it. In addition, research shows that TV programmes are addictive and can be a huge waste of time for many. Secondly, radio has an important value in human life too. This tool is helpful for visually impaired people and interestingly we can work and enjoy radio at the same time unlike TV and carry it with us everywhere we go.   In contrast, radio signals are sometimes weak and limited only in a specific area. Over time this medium is losing its popularity. A book not only shares invaluable information but also contains the facts. Data collected from the past are stored in a book and this is the base for future research. The books help people widening their mind, enhancing their knowledge and learning new things. The books are so far the best medium for communicating information- generation to generation, past to future and are the base of our modern civilisation. I personally think that this is the most effective medium so far and will remain so for many coming generations. Except for the time and patience it requires, I do not find any disadvantages in reading books. From the above discussion, it can be concluded that every medium has its own advantages and demerits. In addition, books are the most effective media they can widen human's minds and convey knowledge from one generation to another.
In
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today
's world, various
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media
and our dependency on them have become quite significant in our life. I believe
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media
like television,
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radio
,
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book
, film,
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theatre
and comics have
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different
advantages and disadvantages as they have subtle differences in the way they convey a message and communicate
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information
. The discussion about the
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of three
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media-
TV,
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radio
and
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books
, will be
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explained
followed by my opinion about the most effective
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medium
and
finally
, a rational conclusion will
be drawn
.

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First of all
, as a modern
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medium
, television has become a part of human life. Most
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people
nowadays have this
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medium
as the tool to
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get
useful
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information
. Even for entertainment, they rely on their TV sets. There is
scarcely
any
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house
that does not
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own
a TV set.
However
, it can
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make
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people
passive, as the viewers
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just
sit on their chairs to
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watch
it.
In addition
, research
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shows
that TV
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programmes
are addictive and can be a huge waste of
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time
for
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many
.

Secondly
,
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radio
has an
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important
value in human life too. This tool is helpful for
visually
impaired
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people
and
interestingly
we can work and enjoy
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radio
at the same
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time
unlike TV and carry it with us everywhere we go.
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In contrast
,
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radio
signals are
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sometimes
weak and limited
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only
in a specific area. Over
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time
this
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medium
is losing its popularity.

A
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book
not
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only
shares invaluable
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information
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but
also
contains the facts. Data collected from the past
are stored
in a
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book
and this is the base for future research. The
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books
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help
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people
widening their mind, enhancing their knowledge and learning new things. The
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books
are
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so
far the best
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medium
for communicating
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information-
generation to generation, past to future and are the base of our modern
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civilisation
. I
personally
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think
that this is the most effective
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medium
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so
far and will remain
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so
for
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many
coming generations.
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Except for
the
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time
and patience it requires, I do not find any disadvantages in reading books.

From the above discussion, it can
be concluded
that every
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medium
has its
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own
advantages and demerits.
In addition
,
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books
are the most effective
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media
they can widen
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human's minds
and convey knowledge from one generation to another.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. v. 12

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
375 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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