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Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good? Use specificreasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

that progress is always good? Use specificreasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
It is believed by most people that a more effective way to encourage people to be hard working is to pay them based on their productivity, while a few others do not agree with this position. In my opinion, the best way to track output is to pay based on hard work from the employed people’s viewpoint and from the employer’s perspective. Several Organizations now understood the psyche of employees, noting that that human wants are endless and fixed income at some point do not satisfy the needs of staff. Resultantly, to have a well motivated workforce, the Human Capital Unit of organizations would rather pay workers based on target achieved than a fixed salary. In effect, they set either monthly or annual goals and pay in excess of the target met. For example, what is obtainable in Stanbic IBTC Bank, where staff salary increases annually based on the percentage of task achieved. Additionally, from the standpoint of employees, they would rather have a regular increase in their pay not minding the extra work demand. Furthermore, they know the extent of toil they put in daily to the growth of their company and would prefer a form of stakeholder reward. Meaning, when they perform well, which invariably increases the company’s gross earnings, they should be paid adequately for a job well done and this will further increase their output and zeal to work. In conclusion, both from the perspective of the employer and that of the employee, payment based on a reward system motivates doggedness than a fixed salary structure, which may not meet employees financial demand, thus resulting in long term clamour for increased pay or may lead to having a disgruntled workforce.
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is believed
by most
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people
that a more effective way to encourage
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people
to be
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hard working
is to
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pay
them based on their productivity, while a few others do not
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agree
with this position. In my opinion, the best way to
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track
output is to
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pay
based on
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hard
work from the employed
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people
’s viewpoint and from the employer’s perspective.

Several Organizations
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now
understood the psyche of
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employees
, noting that that human wants are endless and
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fixed
income at
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some
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point
do not satisfy the needs of staff.
Resultantly
, to have a well motivated workforce, the Human Capital Unit of organizations would
rather
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pay
workers based on target achieved than a
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fixed
salary. In effect, they set either monthly or annual goals and
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pay
in excess of the target met.
For example
, what is obtainable in
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Stanbic
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IBTC
Bank, where staff salary
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increases
annually
based on the percentage of task achieved.

Additionally
, from the standpoint of
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employees
, they would
rather
have a regular
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increase
in their
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pay
not minding the extra work demand.
Furthermore
, they know the extent of toil they put in daily to the growth of their
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company
and would prefer a form of stakeholder reward. Meaning, when they perform well, which
invariably
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increases
the
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company
’s gross earnings, they should
be paid
adequately
for a job well done and this will
further
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increase
their output and zeal to work.

In conclusion
, both from the perspective of the employer and that of the
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employee
, payment based on a reward system motivates doggedness than a
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fixed
salary structure, which may not
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meet
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employees
financial demand,
thus
resulting in long term
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clamour
for increased
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pay
or may lead to having a disgruntled workforce.
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IELTS essay that progress is always good? Use specificreasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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