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"Collapse of Easter Island"

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The reading lists three theories to explain the collapse of the civilization on Easter Island, but the lecture points out flaws in all three theories presented in the reading. The lecturer concedes that palm trees were cleared for agricultural purposes, cooking, the construction of homes and canoes, as well as the transportation of ahu. Nevertheless, the lecturer explains that the islanders replaced the palm trees with grass, which would have prevented erosion and would have allowed for an agricultural base that could have supported the population. Although rats may have eaten many of the young trees, preventing their regrowth, the lecturer maintains that the rats could have been used as a food source for the islanders. In fact, rat bones found in garbage dumps provide evidence that the islanders were eating rats. In other words, they replaced plants with protein in their diet. It is documented that a war occurred between the short-eared and long-eared people on the island, killing many of the islanders on both sides; however, the lecturer presents historical records substantiating that the war was fought in about 1770, which would have been 100 years after the islanders' traditional stories of the war. The difference in the dates brings the entire theory into question. Therefore, none of the three theories accounts for the collapse of the advanced culture that once thrived on Easter Island. What happened is still a mystery
The reading lists three
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theories
to
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explain
the collapse of the civilization on Easter Island,
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but
the

lecture points out flaws in all three
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theories
presented in the reading. The lecturer concedes that palm

trees
were cleared
for agricultural purposes, cooking, the construction of homes and canoes,
as well


as the transportation of
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ahu
.
Nevertheless
, the lecturer
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explains
that the islanders replaced the palm

trees with grass, which would have
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prevented
erosion and would have
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allowed
for an agricultural base

that could have supported the population.

Although rats may have eaten
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many
of the young trees, preventing their regrowth, the lecturer

maintains that the rats could have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
as a food source for the islanders. In fact, rat bones

found in garbage dumps provide evidence that the islanders were eating rats.
In other words
, they

replaced plants with protein in their diet.

It
is documented
that a war occurred between the short-eared and long-eared
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people
on the island,

killing
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many
of the islanders on both sides;
however
, the lecturer presents historical records substantiating that the war
was fought
in about 1770, which would have been 100 years after the islanders'

traditional stories of the war. The difference in the dates brings the entire
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theory
into question.

Therefore
, none of the three
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theories
accounts for the collapse of the advanced culture that once

thrived on Easter Island. What happened is
still
a
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mystery
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IELTS essay "Collapse of Easter Island"

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
232 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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