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The pictorial representation shows the information about the growth of the small coastal village and its area over the past 5 years to attract more tourists. Overall, there was numerous progress has been noted along with the reduction in greenery, also with the development amount of citizens are also increased. In the year 2000, Hamlet has a limited amount of houses which was increased in the year 2005. As a result of it, the living standards of people got to change. It is noticeable that the hotel was also upgraded with a car parking facility. To provides the sport functionalities the Farming land which is used to grow fruits and vegetables was converted into the Golf playground. Also swimming and tennis services were started on the cost of forest park. Additionally, the Fishmarket was developed in the place of Holiday Apartment which was near to the sea. On the other hand, they have also developed the new infrastructure in a small village such as a School for study purposes. They have also created a private beach and cafe and restaurant by cutting down the trees which were surrounding the coastal area of the village. They have also started the Fishing harbor business in the newly developed village.
The pictorial representation
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shows
the information about the growth of the
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small
coastal
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village
and its area over the past 5 years to attract more tourists.
Overall
, there was numerous progress has
been noted
along with the reduction in greenery,
also
with the development amount of citizens are
also
increased.

In the year 2000, Hamlet has a limited amount of
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houses
which
was increased
in the year 2005.
As a result
of it, the living standards of
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people
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got
to
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change
. It is noticeable that the hotel was
also
upgraded with a car parking facility. To provides the sport functionalities the Farming land which is
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used
to grow fruits and vegetables
was converted
into the Golf playground.
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Also
swimming and tennis services were
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started
on the cost of forest park.
Additionally
, the
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Fishmarket
was developed
in the place of Holiday Apartment which was near to the sea.

On the other hand
, they have
also
developed the new infrastructure in a
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small
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village
such as a School for study purposes. They have
also
created a private beach and
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cafe
and restaurant by cutting down the trees which were surrounding the coastal area of the
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village
. They have
also
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started
the Fishing harbor business in the
newly
developed
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village
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IELTS essay coastal village and its surrounding area development

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
207 words
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