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Clock tower roundabout, Dubai

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The given pictures show that how has changed clock tower roundabout from past to present in Dubai. We can see a lot of change and development during some years. In first picture there were empty motorway in past tense. In addition, there were a lot of small and round trees near the roundabout as opposed to present tense. In particular, clock tower which locates the center of roundabout hasn’t been changed yet. Furthermore, a small house was knocked down in past tense and modern buildings have been built at last time. Old and small buildings have been replaced with new and modern buildings, skyscraper during this time. There are a lot of new and modern cars in roundabout in present day in comparison in past days. Moreover a lot of pine trees have been planted around the roundabout since past days. In summarize, Dubai has modernised and renovated during these days.
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clock tower roundabout from
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to present in Dubai. We can
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years. In
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tense.
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, there were a
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small
and round trees near the roundabout as opposed to present tense.
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small
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was knocked
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past
tense and modern buildings have
been built
at last time.
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Old
and
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small
buildings have
been replaced
with new and modern buildings, skyscraper during this time. There are a
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lot
of new and modern cars in roundabout in present day
in comparison
in
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past
days.
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a
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of pine trees have
been planted
around the roundabout since
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days. In summarize, Dubai has
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modernised
and renovated during these days.
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IELTS essay Clock tower roundabout, Dubai

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
151 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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