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Cinema will soon be a thing of past. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Cinema will soon be a thing of past. DqNwp
Nowadays watching movies has become one of the leisure activities for many people. However there are a handful of people who argue that people will spend less time watching movies in the cinema which I disagree with. There are plenty of reasons why I think cinema will continue being the most comfortable place to visit in the near future. To begin with, people in the modern world prefer to go cinema because they want to spend their precious time with their family or friends so as to strengthen their relationships. It is one of the ways that people that days use to socialize each others. By seeing a film with friends in a cinema, they can exchange their thoughts and give comments about the movie that they watched which indirectly opening up an avenue for them to understand their peers better. Whereas, now, it is not uncommon to see most of teenagers actually plan to a cinema during their gathering. Moreover, although there are numerous ways to download movies from the websites due to developing technology, most people still choose to visit the cinema for the sound effects are more advanced there. Apart from this people want to meet their favorite actors after premiers of new films it is a good chance to do it. To sum up, it is not true that people can lose the interest in going cinema as there is evidence which shows that increasing number of visitors there. I believe that cinema will not be faded out, in return, it will continue to flourish in the decades to come
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which I disagree with.

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of reasons why I
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think
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cinema
will continue being the most comfortable place to visit in the near future. To
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with,
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people
in the modern world prefer to go
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cinema
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because
they want to spend their precious time with their family or friends
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strengthen their relationships. It is one of the ways that
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people
that days
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use
to socialize each
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. By seeing a film with friends in a
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cinema
, they can exchange their thoughts and give comments about the
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movie
that they
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watched
which
indirectly
opening up an avenue for them to understand their peers better. Whereas,
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now
, it is not uncommon to
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see
most of
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teenagers
actually plan to a
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cinema
during their gathering.

Moreover
, although there are numerous ways to download
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movies
from the websites due to developing technology, most
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people
still
choose to visit the
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cinema
for the sound effects are more advanced there. Apart from this
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people
want to
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meet
their favorite actors after premiers of new films it is a
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good
chance to do it.

To sum up, it is not true that
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people
can lose the interest in going
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cinema
as there is evidence which
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shows
that increasing number of visitors there. I believe that
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cinema
will not
be faded
out, in return, it will continue to flourish in the decades to
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IELTS essay Cinema will soon be a thing of past.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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