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Children's leisure activities should entirely be educational do you agree or disagree.

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It might be difficult, if not impossible to isolate a society in this world, that is immune to the phenomenon of leisure activities. In the light of the raw realities of the modern world, this situation is only likely to escalate in the coming decades. Playing a central in many related discussions is an issue pertains to the extend to which leisure activities should be made educational. This essay shall analyze the issue from every angle and argue that leisure activities should indeed be educational. A quick perusal of the issue at hand would through a surfeit of seminal reasons supporting some people’s perspective that leisure activities should not have an educational focus. To begin with, such integration is likely to be stressful for children as leisure become just an extension of study. The proponents of the view also feel that playing imaginative games with no educational focus helps children to explore there own thoughts and gains of awareness which is most crucial for molested development for the children. However, frank analysis of the situation would make us realize that the above-mentioned perspective is an archaic approach to whole issue which not only blithely ignores the dynamics of the modern cosmopolitan world but also fails to take into account the progress that we have achieved as human beings. The wheels of the world and real life would come to a halt if we accepted such puritanical arguments. Certain compromises are inevitable and indispensable for the seamless function of the system, and it has high time we realize that the above-mentioned argument is not practical, and any argument leaves fragmentism out of equation is tenable. In my arsenal of arguments supporting the perspective that leisure activities should have an educational focus, one of the most potent is that learning become quite easy and effortless for young children, if it is channelize through leisure. I also feel that those children who lack of problem solving, decision making skills, it is possible to develop some educational attributes through specific games. Finally, I would point that childhood is a face for rapid mental developments and it could be better if children did something useful with their time rather than seriously persuade leisure and make no worthwhile progress to their being. Having considered both sides, it seems ever so sensible to register my disagreement with the statement that leisure activity have an educational element. In spite of the intricate tapestry of arguments delicately woven in favor of leisure activity, it seems unconvincing to my psyche on a subtextual basis. Surfeit to say, it is best to have an educational focus in all leisure activities of children.
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,
that is
immune to the phenomenon of
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leisure
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activities
. In the light of the raw realities of the modern
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world
, this situation is
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only
likely to escalate in the coming decades. Playing a central in
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related discussions is an
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pertains to the
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activities
should
be made
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educational
. This essay shall analyze the
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issue
from every angle and argue that
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leisure
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activities
should
indeed
be educational.

A quick perusal of the
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at hand would through a surfeit of seminal reasons supporting
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people
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educational
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. To
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begin
with, such integration is likely to be stressful for
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children
as
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become
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just
an extension of study. The proponents of the view
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feel that playing imaginative games with no
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educational
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focus
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helps
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children
to explore there
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own
thoughts and gains of awareness which is most crucial for molested development for the children.

However
, frank analysis of the situation would
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make
us realize that the above-mentioned perspective is an archaic approach to whole
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issue
which not
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only
blithely
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ignores
the dynamics of the modern cosmopolitan
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world
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but
also
fails to take into account the progress that we have achieved as human beings. The wheels of the
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world
and real life would
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come
to a halt if we
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accepted
such puritanical
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arguments
. Certain compromises are inevitable and indispensable for the seamless function of the system, and it has high time we realize that the above-mentioned
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argument
is not practical, and any
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argument
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leaves
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fragmentism
out of equation is tenable.

In my arsenal of
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arguments
supporting the perspective that
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leisure
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activities
should have an
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educational
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focus
, one of the most potent is that learning
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become
quite easy and effortless for young
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children
, if it is
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through
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leisure
. I
also
feel that those
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children
who lack of problem solving,
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decision making
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skills
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some
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educational
attributes through specific games.
Finally
, I would point that childhood is a face for rapid mental developments and it could be better if
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children
did something useful with their time
rather
than
seriously
persuade
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leisure
and
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make
no worthwhile progress to their being.

Having considered both sides, it seems ever
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so
sensible to register my disagreement with the statement that
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leisure
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activity
have an
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educational
element.
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In spite of
the intricate tapestry of
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arguments
delicately
woven in favor of
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leisure
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activity
, it seems unconvincing to my psyche on a subtextual basis. Surfeit to say, it is best to have an
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educational
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focus in
all
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leisure
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of
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children
.
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IELTS essay Children's leisure activities should entirely be educational

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
441 words
5.5
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