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Children should spend less time playing computer games do you agree or disagree with the following statement

Children should spend less time playing computer games 6a96j
Nowadays majority of children are being forbidden from spending time on computer gamesI am in strong agreement with this idea and in this essay I’ll support my opinion with examplesInitially looking at the computer screen would drive Childs capitalize lazyIn other words playing computer games could lead to addiction actually when it becomes a habit it’s somehow hard to break it and leave the game in the middle of that much excitementFor example many children don’t plan on spending four hours any game but when they start failing and winning they spend for more than they expectedAnother reason why I agree faith reducing past time on computer games is that if children seat and a chair without moving for long hours they’ll get used to sedantry lifestyleIn case they would rather be less active than the children hanging out in the football fields healthwise it would lead to a problem my brother is a great example had he not kept sitting he would have been in shape in conclusion as this idea decrease in the time spent on computerIs getting popular in my point of you their division would be defected Besides the forming body would be affected irreparably
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majority of
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gamesI
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examplesInitially
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lazyIn
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games
could lead to addiction actually when it becomes a habit it’s somehow
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hard
to break it and
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leave
the game in the middle of that much
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excitementFor
example
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many
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children
don’t plan on spending four hours any game
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when they
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start
failing and winning they spend for more than they
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expectedAnother
reason why I
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agree
faith reducing
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on computer
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games
is that if
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children
seat and a chair without moving for long hours they’ll
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get
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used
to
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sedantry
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lifestyleIn
case they would
rather
be less active than the
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children
hanging out in the football fields
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healthwise
it would lead to a problem my brother is a great example had he not
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kept
sitting he would have been in shape
in conclusion
as this
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idea
decrease in the time spent on
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computerIs
getting popular in my point of you their division would
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the forming body would be
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affected
irreparably
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IELTS essay Children should spend less time playing computer games

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
198 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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