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children should always follow their parents'advice. to what extend do you agree? v.2

children should always follow their parents'advice. v. 2
According to some people the proper way for children to grow up as a highly-esteemed and successful person is parents' advices. To a certain extent I agree that, advices from experienced people are always useful for a new generation, however, I also believe that in some occasion advices can misdirect children. On the one hand, it is obvious that parents have greater knowledge and awareness about the life, due to that their directives could the best assistants of the children who encountered a challenge for the first time. Obeying to the parents' advices leads the adolescents to the achievements and success. Moreover, owing to the insufficient information, children might not make the appropriate decision in the right time and this will lead to undesirable consequences. On the other hand, in recent years, juveniles are more diligent and smarter than the earlier generations and some of them are highly determined and is able to identify themselves for what would be suitable and beneficial. In my opinion, children who have the features aforementioned above might lead to wrong direction by implying the advices which gave by their parents. For example, in my country some parents instill becoming a lawyer or a doctor to their sons or daughters despite some of them have a potential as well as unique skills to become a well-known football player or a popular artist from whom people inspire. To put it another way, parents should not impose the directives to the children and complying to the advices is not an obligation for young generation. In conclusion, I agree that in special circumstances, parents advices could be life-saving, but it should be interpreted as an imperative.
According to
some
people
the proper way for
children
to grow up as a
highly
-esteemed and successful person is parents'
advices
. To a certain extent I
agree
that,
advices
from experienced
people
are always useful for a new generation,
however
, I
also
believe that in
some
occasion
advices
can misdirect children.

On the one hand, it is obvious that
parents
have greater knowledge and awareness about the life, due to that their directives could the best assistants of the
children
who encountered a challenge for the
first
time. Obeying to the parents'
advices
leads the adolescents to the achievements and success.
Moreover
, owing to the insufficient information,
children
might not
make
the appropriate decision in the right time and this will lead to undesirable consequences.

On the other hand
, in recent years, juveniles are more diligent and smarter than the earlier generations and
some
of them are
highly
determined and is able to identify themselves for what would be suitable and beneficial. In my opinion,
children
who have the features aforementioned above might lead to
wrong
direction by implying the
advices
which gave by their
parents
.
For example
, in my country
some
parents
instill becoming a lawyer or a doctor to their sons or daughters despite
some
of them have a potential
as well
as unique
skills
to become a well-known football player or a popular artist from whom
people
inspire. To put it another way,
parents
should not impose the directives to the
children
and complying to the
advices
is not an obligation for young generation.

In conclusion
, I
agree
that in special circumstances,
parents
advices
could be life-saving,
but
it should
be interpreted
as an imperative.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay children should always follow their parents'advice. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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